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Jun 28, 2020
6/28/20, 6:01 PM
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6/28/20, 6:00 PM
a great addition to the series
Aaron
6/28/20, 4:55 PM
One of the best authors on the planet
Anonymous
6/28/20, 4:50 PM
im with throwawayname, you know what the story is even before we read it and trust where you take the story. also, you arent getting paid for this so you shouldnt have to rewrite chapters you already put work in.
Beefysub
6/28/20, 3:56 PM
oh wow! man, that's among the hottest stories here! wish i were the carrier! cheers from Berlin
Anonymous
6/28/20, 3:15 PM
Love the premise. Wouldn't mind seeing some unpleasant urinal service worked into the story if it jives with where you're taking things :)
6/28/20, 3:02 PM
Also, this is just a matter of personal taste, but it really rubs me the wrong way when authors insert lengthy in-story justifications for what are essentially acts of mind-rape. (See: "Matt hadn’t turned them gay, instead his gifts had opened their hearts and minds to find the desirable and good in each other and to be attracted to it. In effect, they no longer had a set orientation; all caring, consenting adults were theirs to find pleasure and joy with. Although he personally had always preferred men, Matt knew all forms of responsible sex and intimacy were good for them").
6/28/20, 3:00 PM
> Also are you going to continue this scenario to where Mark cuts the hair on his head? > Ah, the perspective of twenty years later... I would absolutely include two things: one, the haircut, as you mention. I would really love to write a Samson-esque pastiche where he loses his confidence and sense of security as the hair comes off. Two, I'd definitely include a scene where Kenny fucks Mark, really dominates him, and Mark surrenders completely.
6/28/20, 2:57 PM
You're telling the story in 3rd person anyway, so it wouldn't feel too fragmented if you just gave us the story filtered through Matt's perspective at the beginning, then cut to another scene where one of Matt's slaves was recruiting his friend. That way, we could get the 3rd person narration sharing some of the friend's thoughts, as well as some of the slave's thoughts. This would also take care of the other problem I had with the story, which is that Matt is constantly telling us how happy all his slaves are (and the omniscient narration is backing him up on that). In my opinion, it works a lot better if you SHOW the slave's happiness from the slave's perspective rather than TELLING us about the slave's happiness from the master's perspective.
6/28/20, 2:57 PM
Carson/Carl will have a better sex life as the new him, not the vanilla stuff he most likely would have had