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6/28/20, 11:24 AM
My target is around 2000 words per chunk of the story, so they're going to be a little quicker than I usually write.
Jun 28, 2020
DD
6/28/20, 11:03 AM
Cosmic karma, it's an all or nothing deal. take the money, take the life. I wonder if we will see the other Bart make a better life for himself with the thief's attributes?
6/28/20, 9:44 AM
It's a little fast-paced (as magic amulet stories tend to be), but otherwise VERY hot. I love how the boys accept the notion that they suddenly have a Frat Daddy.
6/28/20, 9:16 AM
Thank you all for the comments, it's wonderful to see there are so many others who loved the source material too & I can't wait to see how this develops as a community series :) Here's a link to Xavier's contributions, I think he may start posting them here as well https://www.nifty.org/nifty/gay/sf-fantasy/carriers-and-donors/ Any ideas / suggestions people have for sequels/prequels or what they'd like to see next would be greatly welcomed, just DM or comment - I definitely want to keep the ball rolling, so getting inspiration for new material is always great
6/28/20, 9:03 AM
Hm, the concept is still pretty hot, but really something about his friend having pretty much lost his personality turns me off. This idea could've still worked even if his friend was still who he was, and the two of them actively tried to figure out the consequences of becoming a sex god together, as opposed to one being the only one actually thinking while the other is a glorified sex genie.
6/28/20, 8:48 AM
i like where this story is going and i trust your storytelling. It'd be great to get a story tomorrow.
6/28/20, 8:26 AM
I agree with Hypnothrill above. This was a very well done chapter and it would be awesome if you can expand on the story and show more of The Crew. I especially thought that the mind controlling sequence was done very well and I like how the dad played the father role in such a sinister way, that was very good. I also liked the son's resistance too, he put up quite of a fight there. I also loved the whole symbiote aspect of it all, characters referring to themselves in the third person and how far gone his dad truly was. I'm wondering if the entire town is already under the influence of The Crew or are they just expanding right now? Anyway I hope thats something that can be explored.
6/28/20, 8:20 AM
I agree it's a very hot story, and I'd love to see it expanded with more chapters where we see "The Crew" spreading throughout the town. The only thing that felt a bit off to me was Matt's initial reaction to his father's mysterious transformation; it felt like he was already sexually attracted to his father. I think it might have been hotter if Matt initially viewed his father's overmuscled body with disgust, as something freakish and grotesque; then, we'd see him start to view it as attractive and desirable once he fell under the Crew's mind control.
Growing Geek
6/28/20, 7:33 AM
I like it, nice job. There are some points where I some repetition in words got in the way of the flow (e.g. 3 uses of 'after' in the two sentences 'Leave it to Dustin, the lucky one of the two, to want to go after he won tickets to it after a raffle at work. After the two were seated and the show started it wasn’t as bad as Carson thought that it would be, still it wouldn’t be something he’d pay to see.'). I'd also have really liked it to be longer - it feels like the transformation is over really quickly, I'd have found it hot to understand what Carson/Carl feels about his changing body. Are his habits different? His taste in men? And I'd want to know if him and Dustin hooked up and how Dustin felt. Is Carl better than Carson? Does Dustin get changed too as a result of meeting him? It feels like it's a good start - and don't get me wrong, it is a good start! - but it also feels like there's more we could experience about the world to make it even better.
6/28/20, 7:27 AM
I'm always excited to see a story with "recruitment" in the tags, but I felt disappointed that we didn't really see the recruitment taking place (only the aftermath, when Matt sees the photos of the new recruits). I think the story would work a lot better if it wasn't so tied to Matt's perspective and we got more details about how his slaves were lustfully viewing the friends they recruited, or how the new recruits rationalized the sudden change of sexuality. Also, the tone is just too sweet for my taste. The story is going HARD on the notion that Matt is actually helping these men by changing their sexual orientation and roping them into his harem of sex slaves, and I'm not buying it.