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6/26/20, 2:24 PM
Please don't mistake me by my statement that exposition has changed over the years that I think it's changed for the BETTER -- I don't!!! I'm just pointing out that it has and here, in this story, the exposition amounts to half the story... and it works BRILLIANTLY!
nycboot
6/26/20, 2:11 PM
Hey abs, I understand what you talking about when one knows the story already - the exposition seems longer and less important and you just wanna get to the good stuff. But what's so wonderful about this story is that the backstory is so good that it really takes you into the mind of Eddie. The reader is really puzzled (if fascinated) by the new versions of Tony, Mark and Jerod, the big question being "How did they get that way?" So it's not just the transformation sequence (which is superb), but because the character has captured our empathy and that the reader is dying to know what happened, prepares for the third chapter, making the transformation all the more thrilling, thus making the story so stupendous. And I know at least in my case, Eddie's "coming out" kinda reminds me of my coming out (now over 40 years ago) - I looked at magazines and thought no, yes, no, yes, etc. There are so many stories on this site that explore the straight-to-gay theme that clearly many guys also try to relive their own recognition of their orientation. So watching Eddie struggle maybe captures an extra something that most of us have experienced as well.
6/26/20, 1:56 PM
So HOT, so detailed, you've got me wanting/begging for more. If you published a book series, I would buy every one of them!
6/26/20, 1:53 PM
I remember the first time I read this story -- I didn't get past the underwear section before I shot a load. I'm not kidding when I say it took me, like, four reads to get completely through this chapter -- that's how masterful it is. As time has gone by, this style of story has changed and exposition has become less important. I mean, here we had to wait THREE chapters before the transformation occurred -- and even then it's painfully drawn out. Brilliantly paced. True erotic writing does lead to a climax -- often literally. And I've cum back to this story again and again.
nycboot
6/26/20, 1:45 PM
Technical note: There are hundreds of stories on this site where a character takes something that enchants him and changes his life. But what's so simple and brilliant in this story is that Onix provides Eddie with not a single item but a whole gift package containing a cornucopia of items. Thus the character has the opportunity to transform multiple times and in multiple stages. That's one of the things that makes this chapter so brilliant and so....I **know** I'm not alone here...so arousing that one has to j/o.
6/26/20, 1:45 PM
Your words arouse my total core and keep me on the brink with each sentence. I can visually see the action and wish I was there with them. Great storytelling!
6/26/20, 1:32 PM
You kept me hard through the whole story, wanting (and needing) more! Gotta read more while I'm leaking!
6/26/20, 11:34 AM
OMG this is fucking hot
Thom
6/26/20, 11:08 AM
Really wondering where you're taking this
6/26/20, 11:00 AM
poor Leo hasn't even noticed how Coach actually helps him to be a better mind controller. He's kinda...dumb,in the best way possible. XD