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nycboot
6/26/20, 1:45 PM
Technical note: There are hundreds of stories on this site where a character takes something that enchants him and changes his life. But what's so simple and brilliant in this story is that Onix provides Eddie with not a single item but a whole gift package containing a cornucopia of items. Thus the character has the opportunity to transform multiple times and in multiple stages. That's one of the things that makes this chapter so brilliant and so....I **know** I'm not alone here...so arousing that one has to j/o.
6/26/20, 1:45 PM
Your words arouse my total core and keep me on the brink with each sentence. I can visually see the action and wish I was there with them. Great storytelling!
6/26/20, 1:32 PM
You kept me hard through the whole story, wanting (and needing) more! Gotta read more while I'm leaking!
6/26/20, 11:34 AM
OMG this is fucking hot
Thom
6/26/20, 11:08 AM
Really wondering where you're taking this
6/26/20, 11:00 AM
poor Leo hasn't even noticed how Coach actually helps him to be a better mind controller. He's kinda...dumb,in the best way possible. XD
Speedos
6/26/20, 8:21 AM
Great story! But I totally agree about making diapers more integral to the story. As something erotic, as a symbol of submission, or as part of the wethou Edwards uses in the brainwashing. Really cool world building! I love the traditional hypnosis and Wiley logic used to make them love their master and their diapers.
6/26/20, 7:55 AM
You really are one of the best authors on the site. I have enjoyed reading this story so much (if you know what I mean)
6/26/20, 6:27 AM
Wowza. Loved it.
6/26/20, 6:04 AM
In Greek Mythology, there is the story of the SIRENS. They were dangerous creatures, who lured nearby sailors with their singing voices to shipwreck on a rocky coast. This is the story behind the story that Ready to Change has given us here. I read this as a test composition. Ready to Change putting down in words the notes he has been hearing in his head. Would anyone else be tempted by this melody? I can tell you that I certainly was. I over looked the lapses in the plot, because I bought into the story early on. One clever writing devise is not to name the anti-hero. By not giving him a name, we automatically insert our own name into the story. That's exactly the point. We, like the ancient sailors, are sucked into the plot. If this was intentional or accidental, doesn't matter. It shows great narrative skills. Sometimes, the shorter and simpler the composition is the better test of talent.