Edlam! Oh Fuck Yeah. That was literally the first erotica I've ever written (except one hot email to this one guy one time!) I know it's just dialog, and there's more to do. I'm generally bad at coming up with premises. But I can run with ideas and structure. But Fuck Yeah. I'd be honored. how can we take this offline? Glad you liked it!

Holy shit, yes!! You wanna write something together?! That is BEYOND hot...part if me wants to edit the story and add it hahaha

I can't say enough how much I love both your work As for this I came three times! I read the middle on front porch and had to go inside! I love how you dramatize the hypnosis while also keeping the sex moving. (And you don't bog down in exact heights ans weights and dick sizes, unless the character is noticing dick size. Because announcing your dick size in the third sentence is not something anyone does!) I saw earlier comments that Chris was allowed to cum to easily. If you'll permit me this one but of fanfic: Chris: Please please give me permission to cum! Rick: But why? What does your cumming do for my pleasure? What will you do for me? Chris: Anything Sir. Anything you want! Rick: But my dear boy, you know you worship and adore me as the most superior sexual being you've ever met. It's not gay. It's just who I am, and how you see me. So we both know you would do anything for me already. Even if I don't permit you to cum Alec: *continues to pound his mouth away on Chris's cock; tension building* Chris: Aww... c'mon man. What do you want from me?!?! I need to nut into my best friend's mouth pussy! Rick: what I want, dear boy, is to know what you are personally willing without suggestion to give up of your own volition, so that you can have this one, and only one orgasm. The choice is yours. Chris: Aw shit. Well, Sir, I really want to blow. please... so it would have to be something really valuable, Rick. I mean Sir Rick. I mean Sir. No, I mean Master Rick. Rick: I'm listening. And Alec isn't slowing down anytime soon... Chris: uggggh. My car?!?! I started a lease on a BWM i8. I thought it'd be a real chick magnet. But no chick is worth this blowjob. Take my car. I'll pay the lease, of course. I'll take the bus, Master Rick! Rick: hmmmm. Alright, I'll accept your car. But I don't know if a lifetime of bus riding would really remind you of your place. Sure, you'd be a bum, a loser, unable to date the women you want as someone who is 100% straight. But would it remind you of your place under me?! I'm gonna need more. Chris: Absolutely. You're right, Master. You deserve the best. Awwww, Please let me cum. ... Ok. I know I'm still an alpha muscle manly stud. That's why I'll fuck my bitch slut cum dumpster baby bro whenever you ask! But still, Master Rick, I'm no man at all compared to you, who we both know I'd do anything for. I should show that with my body. For me to carry with wherever I go. please let me come! Please, Sir, Master, Lord. I'll give you my body hair, my manly pelt. Electrolysis first thing tomorrow. Everything, Sir, below the eyebrows. My stubble. My armpits. My chest pelt, treasure trail. My bush and balls. My ass crack. Even my legs down to wisps of my toes. It's all yours. Because even though I'm an alpha hunk, I'm just a little boy toy muscle hypnosis fuck robot next to you, Master, just a notch above my bitch cum dump brother! PLEASE, MASTER! Rick: Very good, muscle slave. I'll accept your sportscar, as well as this apartment, which even your boypussy brother knew was already mine. And the gracious offer of your alpha pelt, my newly smooth muscle boy. Chris: Thank you. Aaaaaagh. So good. So fucking sensitive! ugh. So may i have your permission to cum? You're my God, Master! Please let me cum! Rick: Not yet. This has taken too long. As I'm sure your swollen raw spit-slick man-clit already knows! I can't go through this every time you get close, muscle slave boy! Chris: Uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuugh. My God, please let me cum. Please, Master! I'll never ask again! I'll nut only when you want me to. Just let me cum this once. When Alec started sucking me off, I wasn't ready. Even though, I know you completely dictate my orgasms, Master Rick, because you are the ultimate superior male being! Rick: How can I be sure? Chris: PLEEEEEASE, Master. I promise. Lock me up in a chastity belt! Just allow me this one last orgasm, Master Rick. Have pity on my beefcake slave fuck robot cock! Arrgh! CUT OFF MY BALLS IF YOU WANT TO! Rick: Slave? Chris: YES, MASTER (please let me cum please) What do you require? Rick: CUM NOW! thanks for listening. hope i got somebody off. really a great epic here! hope for more

Make daddy dump his wife already! Let’s see him steal her wedding ring and propose to his new lover, his son, his master.

I'm pretty sure my interest in himbos comes from Eddie's and Mark's transformations. And Eddie is definitely why I went blond for a while when I was like 19 or 20. And now that I think of it, I think this story might be why I started lifting too. I'm nowhere near the size of Absman or ONIX, but there's still lots of weight to move. Man, I wonder just how much of my life this story has influenced.

So many reads over the years... This story definitely gave me my cigar and leather fetishes (the Jarod character).

I liked this story. Dad/son is always hot. I would have liked to see the beginning, "What do you mean you're gay?" in the middle of the story after some development of their relationship. Were they close? How did the mom's death effect their relationship? Did they have a buddy buddy relationship or a more distant relationship? Any hidden animosity or lust? Or the struggle the narrator had about telling his father he was gay. His worries of his Dad's reaction. Or even that question could be a part of the magic. My recommendation, turn this into a longer, more developed story. Add some teasers like "every morning I got up at 6am even though it was too early for me. Dad always walked naked to the shower at that time and I loved to watch his hairy, morning-thick, dick . " Develop the magic some more, for example in stages, as he learns more of its power. Dad walking naked to the shower could be a good result of the use of its magic. Or perhaps the magic of the necklace is changing them slowly, from distant to close, from non sexual to sexual. Once you have it figured out and written, submit it to the on-going "Magic" challenge. And see how you come out in the challenge. And as you read other magic challenge stories, you'll think more on them as you read them because you are vested in it. You'll appreciate other writer's ways of expressing an idea or describing an action, sexual and non sexual, that you also may have dealt with.

I thoroughly enjoy this story. Its a well written raceplay story that integrates the mind-change pretty nicely

Big bro/lil bro stories always get me going. Loved the twist!

Glad to see you're cross-posting the [really fucking hot] oldies, @absman420. As for me, I frequently return to your "Recruits" story.