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Lusty Stallion
6/23/20, 5:59 AM
Loved it man. Glad you explained the mechanics situation. Keep up the great work
Lusty Stallion
6/23/20, 5:44 AM
Really hot. Not a fan of water works to be honest, but loved the rest of both parts. I love a good wish changing device
Redan
6/23/20, 5:31 AM
This story makes me hella uncomfortable, especially references of people as scum. Given the rest of the imagery in the story, I can only assume that said scum wasn't a white person. Honestly this reads more of a radicalization story than a mind control story.
MrH
6/23/20, 5:25 AM
hot concept!
6/23/20, 5:22 AM
This was quite hot.
6/23/20, 5:10 AM
Give us a sequel! More action at the police station:)
6/23/20, 4:39 AM
BoSS, The second chapter was as good as, if not better than the first. The way you write about subtle changes in the protagonist always hits the spot. Hopefully, there can be more parts as to the story...
6/23/20, 3:12 AM
OOOOOOOOh that sounds like a very promising story arc! No pressure here, I understand that its tough to write these stories, but if you decide to write that story arc, know that you have at least one supporter over here! Maybe Nate might get even a little jealous when a sired packmate gets too close to his puppy jock soulmate? It certainly has promise.
6/23/20, 2:28 AM
Sure thing, suggestions are always appreciated! And I won't lie, I really did consider the option of Nate turning into a werewolf some time in the future. The thing is, I feel like that would sort of ruin the mind control aspect of the soulmate bond. Dave is also Nate's soulmate, so if he became a werewolf, who would obey who? Would they obey each other or would neither of them obey the other? They would definitely love each other, that's sure. But as far as I can imagine, the "Nate controls Dave's mind and body" part would be gone, probably for good since the werewolf status is permanent. The idea of Dave siring a pack crossed my mind too. Since he's the alpha, would they have to mindlessly do what he says? (If Nate was sired by Dave, would he be obedient to his alpha?). If we combined that with Human!Nate controlling Dave, it would be a pretty nice scenario to see (Nate controlling Dave, who controls the rest of the sired werewolves. Like a "the master of the master" thing or something like that). I'm not saying the story is going there, because I haven't fleshed out the idea enough, nor have I thought about it. But it's indeed a nice turn the story could take somewhere in the future, maybe in a future arc? Who knows :p.
6/23/20, 1:30 AM
If you're open to suggestions and willing to expand Nate and Dave's story, maybe you can explore the idea of Nate being turned into a werewolf? The lore and superpowers of werewolves have not been explored too far in the story, but I'm thinking that the tropes existing in vampire stories might work for this series where the human love interest transforms into a supernatural being as well Again, just an idea, but maybe have Nate go through a life or death situation where the only way he survives is to turn in to a werewolf. And then maybe we can go through another story arc of him dealing with his new status as a werewolf. And who knows, he might end up earning some new soulmate powers (like maybe a soulmate pack where he and Dave could sire a pack of werewolves under their thrall). I think it would be interesting to delve in the werewolf lore of it all