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6/13/20, 6:42 PM
I'm glad Ricky finally gets past all the guilt/self-doubt stuff, but I'd love to see more of the non-sexual side of this story again. The hero worship and naked admiration, the workouts, the desire to be as big as his big bro. The way Truck makes Ricky feel safe and protected, his desire for Truck's approval and the way he looks to him for guidance. His absolute trust. The things I wish I'd gotten from my big bros growing up, that had nothing to do with sex. Don't get me wrong, I'm fucking loving the sex parts! But you could really make this into my all time favorite story if you get back to paying attention to some of the seeds you planted in Chapter One.
6/13/20, 6:31 PM
That certain little bro is one lucky fucker! This story is the hottest thing I've read in a good long while! Craving more, big bro.
EJG
6/13/20, 5:51 PM
Daddy Pietro's not gonna be too happy his little sluts been playing around with all these Alphas
6/13/20, 5:40 PM
Phew, thanks! I literally haven't done any creative writing since 2002, and never erotica. But as an avid consumer of smutty fiction over the years, I guess I internalized a lot of the dos and don'ts :) TBH, I originally wanted to write something just based on the gotta get fucked/can't cum/ball growth thing, but needed something a little extra for it to make sense on this particular website. Your Truth or Dare idea seemed like a great entry point, and now I'm going to have to figure out how to flesh out the other characters and give them meaningful stuff to do while still centering it around Fareed and his experience.
6/13/20, 5:06 PM
Awesome and amazing, I loved that chapter, you have nothing to be worried about with your writing, that was great! I liked how you changed who was giving out the questions. Can't wait to see what you have to come.
Anonymous
6/13/20, 4:13 PM
This is getting hotter with every chapter. I'm loving this series.
Willie Cici
6/13/20, 4:11 PM
Diolch, JockMeBro. Dyma fy ymgais at hiwmor.
6/13/20, 3:45 PM
defnydd doniol iawn o'r Gymraeg
mbblover
6/13/20, 3:12 PM
READS REALLY REALLY PROMISING! I LOVE LOVE LOVE a great straight drop dead gorgeous musclebound superhero captured, conquered and converted by a "lesser" a "beta" quote villian story/storyline!... this 1st chapter reminds me of the great superhero stories of the great writer kyle cicero!.... i hope to read many many more chapters of this story, take your time i say and don't make it "campy" but make it how should i say realistic and serious mixed with dirty kinky pervy wickedness! love the whole power control role reversal aspect of this and other stories! thanks so far!..
jockboy111
6/13/20, 2:40 PM
100% agree with you on typos, i do have a lot of them and probably need someone to edit but i don't have anyone to edit. Also theres going to be some dumbing down so expect more typos