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Jun 7, 2020
6/7/20, 10:11 AM
Very hot! A great take on a classic story trope.
Rubeus
6/7/20, 9:30 AM
Speed Reading fail: At first glance I thought this story was called "A Merman's True Calling". Now there'd be a story twist.
6/7/20, 8:49 AM
I loved this chapter! I liked the moment between Mike and Pine when he willingly let Pine dominate him
6/7/20, 8:48 AM
This is considered a classic in the genre. It's the first piece of fetish fiction I can remember reading. Coming back to it now, fifteen years later, it seems tame. The idea is solid, but the story could use some jazzing up.
Anonymous
6/7/20, 8:32 AM
terrific
Anonymous
6/7/20, 6:59 AM
A little extra editing would do a lot to help this one out. There are some places where the paragraphs get really long, making them hard to read. The points where you change between the narrators aren’t always that easy to identify, which can lead to a muddled narrative
suitedsubmissive
6/7/20, 6:08 AM
Excellent story, Sir. A transformation i always fantasize about for myself...
6/7/20, 5:44 AM
Kind of curious what would happen if the "subject" of the cards realizes what's happening and actively conspires with the cards as they change him.
6/7/20, 5:27 AM
BoSS, another great story.
6/7/20, 4:07 AM
Coach Geoff is a nice guy, less bravado than the other football coaches; interested in seeing how Pine has him helping to save the sports club. It's interesting to see Pine get more advice from his inner version of himself, especially how to take down Leo should it come to that. Pine's darker side is revealed but even it seems to agree with Pine's code.