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Anonymous
6/7/20, 8:32 AM
terrific
Anonymous
6/7/20, 6:59 AM
A little extra editing would do a lot to help this one out. There are some places where the paragraphs get really long, making them hard to read. The points where you change between the narrators aren’t always that easy to identify, which can lead to a muddled narrative
suitedsubmissive
6/7/20, 6:08 AM
Excellent story, Sir. A transformation i always fantasize about for myself...
6/7/20, 5:44 AM
Kind of curious what would happen if the "subject" of the cards realizes what's happening and actively conspires with the cards as they change him.
6/7/20, 5:27 AM
BoSS, another great story.
6/7/20, 4:07 AM
Coach Geoff is a nice guy, less bravado than the other football coaches; interested in seeing how Pine has him helping to save the sports club. It's interesting to see Pine get more advice from his inner version of himself, especially how to take down Leo should it come to that. Pine's darker side is revealed but even it seems to agree with Pine's code.
Anonymous
6/7/20, 3:12 AM
I'm so glad to see you made another part! Hope to see even more from you in the future!
Anonymous
6/7/20, 3:01 AM
Loved it!!!
Anonymous
6/7/20, 3:00 AM
Great story!!! Loved it!!!
Jun 6, 2020
6/7/20, 2:55 AM
Damn this was such a hot chapter. Theres so much to love here. Your staple chloroform knockout scenes are always top notch and never disappoints. That particular scene where he knocks Josh up whole so sucking him was hot, its probably my favorite part of the story. The whole edging thing and having no permission to cum is also up my alley. I love mind controlled guys who don't have the freedom to shoot whenever they want, its such a turn on for me. I also love Jacob and Marco together, they make a very sweet couple Please continue to write more stories, I really love your work!