Recent Comments

5/31/20, 9:32 AM
This is truly an excellent story for a new writer and I am enjoying it immensely. My only critique is that a few paragraphs here and there would help tremendously instead of it seeming to all be smushed together. Overall, it is fantastic and I would change anything except for making it a few paragraph changes. Just my opinion.
Tom
5/31/20, 8:03 AM
Amazing!!! Love the mention of ethan and toby, such a good little easter egg! Your work really is amazing
5/31/20, 6:39 AM
Yes! Later today, if everything goes well. Sorry for the wait!
5/31/20, 6:24 AM
Great story! I love the Simon Says scene--it's rare to get a picture into the head of a mind-controlled person watching their "victim." And an Ethan with green hair...and a belt buckle--oh my God, that's from "Good Boy Handbook!" :D Crossover universe CONFIRMED! :p
Anonymous
5/31/20, 6:03 AM
this is so good! love the cartoonish elements
5/31/20, 3:41 AM
You've hit a great part in this chapter where they end up bigger than intended. I would not mind at all if that theme were continued! Regardless, loving where you're taking this and I'll keep refreshing for the next chapter!
M.
5/31/20, 3:27 AM
Holy FUCK! That was such a hot chapter. Many thanks!
5/31/20, 3:25 AM
And so the origin of Jeremy's world came from what seems to be innocent play.
May 30, 2020
Anonymous
5/31/20, 3:14 AM
Amazing!! Thank you so much ;)
5/31/20, 3:10 AM
Love the Doctor Who reference, keep it up!