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RicanCub
5/24/20, 4:35 PM
excellent! cant wait for more!
5/24/20, 4:12 PM
“I’ll need to ditch the gas mask, so I’ll need you two to stay at least six feet behind me." HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA (in all seriousness, great story. keep it up.)
5/24/20, 3:29 PM
Ok, ya gotta keep going on this amazing story! And really soon!!
Anonymous
5/24/20, 3:27 PM
I kind of agree with Rotherham... I didnt feel rushed as much as it needed to be longer, more of the seduction, as if the victim wondered what it was he needed or more detail on what the changes felt like. It's not a criticism: it's a compliment that you've created a story people want more of. So now get to work and write a chapter 2 with more detail
Anonymous
5/24/20, 2:47 PM
wonderful surprise...great work
5/24/20, 2:34 PM
I rather like this one. It seems like the changes are likely to persist when they get home though. I wonder ... since the society has clearly had to adjust to the Change, why did it happen? They must have been more like our travellers' original world, though maybe something like the Change happened at a later date or was not as universal. It would be interesting if they could help with the stability issues.
5/24/20, 2:30 PM
i loved this, greetings from an austrian.
5/24/20, 2:27 PM
Sad perhaps that he's not going to have fond memories of his vacation from his usual self.
suitedsubmissive
5/24/20, 1:41 PM
An excellent start to this story. Your work is always so well-written. I'm excited to see where this piece goes!
nycboot
5/24/20, 1:23 PM
Thanks for starting a new story! I'm sure I always compliment you on your imaginative and masterful use of language in sentences like: "...the hen night began innocently enough in the bride’s flat with a few glasses of sparkling white wine and a lingerie saleswoman who showed off her wares to the giggling titillation of those present," and even a small turn of the phrase like "boa constrictor hug." They make your stories so enjoyable to read. :)