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5/19/20, 11:10 PM
I love how he became the alpha. Thats so cool. Especially considering most similar stories would have made him a sub. So yeah him being an alpha top is brilliant. My one thought was too bad he didnt use his mighty tongue to rim the friend, that woukd have filled him with bliss. Hehe Looking forward to him making the bullies into his good boys.
5/19/20, 9:46 PM
nycboot, my sincerest apologies for putting pressure on you to start writing your ending to Bargain. I think you've laid out your points very well and I have no doubt that you will write something worthy of the Bargain story. I'm looking forward to your story and if there's any way I can help you just let me know.
5/19/20, 9:41 PM
Really like this story. Great idea.
Anonymous
5/19/20, 8:30 PM
Excellent! Very hot and well written. Looking forward to the next installment!
5/19/20, 7:33 PM
Hello Bazir. Thanks for your feedback! I'm glad you're enjoying the new chapter and I'm happy to hear you liked the design of the "chair" inside the chambers. If you're referring to a character that already exists: No, the other character is not the same character. It was just a side-character without any certain relevance to the story. But I may pick up the idea since it's a nice point to start another storyline for the character you're referring to.
5/19/20, 7:30 PM
Thank you for the comments so far. @Azzellover: You're quite right; definitely thought of this a side story to the main story, but at this point I can make it its own story and there can be an antagonist (or protagonist depending how you see it) in it now. Thank you for the idea; it will be included in the story. @Hypnothrill: Again as always thank you for your comments and critiques. This chapter didn't come as smoothly as the Prologue, so that may be where the long sentence came for. Hopefully the next chapters will come with less struggle. As to the obsidian eyes, all of Ari'seth's followers have them. The workman knew he was meeting with Captain Collins so he had his eyes out already to show he wasn't an ordinary deliveryman. It's the same way with the uniforms; Ari'seth's uniform morphs into the regular police uniform (or the attire Roberts was wearing); so when Ari'seth made Collins and the other captains made cum, the uniform appeared as an ordinary police uniform, but was in fact Ari'seth uniform. @MalSkin: You're right; not all the people are under Ari'seth's control. Ari'seth is trying to spread his control to everyone and, according to the original story, Ari'seth has a female counterpart who will control the female population. I won't get into that in my story.
5/19/20, 7:06 PM
MORE PLEASE!!!
Anonymous
5/19/20, 7:01 PM
Damn Me exact fantasy!!
5/19/20, 2:31 PM
you are right New Guy, in pointing out that th mayor is under the control of Ari’seth, (what i should have said he would have gained his permission before hand) but wearing a uniform while on duty has been instilled into the police officers, as you pointed out in a previous chapter. Not all the population of the town will be under his control, eg women and those of a younger age
5/19/20, 1:55 PM
Very hot story, New Guy, and I can't wait to see what comes next. One little writing suggestion: you don't need to describe every non-sexual action in great detail (e.g. a long sentence just to describe the opening of a cardboard box). Also, I was wondering: if Ari'seth's converts all have obsidian eyes, then how do they keep others from noticing that? It might be a hot detail if they hid their eyes with mirrored sunglasses.