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5/18/20, 10:56 AM
Thanks, as always, for your positive comments nycboot. I think that jump-cuts are required when multiple viewpoints are involved. It may be to do with the cinema, but I also think that writing has evolved since the Victorian novel when an entire work would be written only from the perspective of the central character. Jane Eyre comes to mind. I think that a modern version of this novel might also include chapters written from the point of view of Rochester and perhaps even Mrs Reed or the mad woman in the attic. I'm not sure that this means that writing is dead. It perhaps means that readers expect to experience issues from more than one viewpoint. There is also a certain skill involved in presenting the perspective of varying characters authentically. Most of Dickens' narrators were young men, rather like he was in his youth. He obviously felt comfortable writing from that viewpoint. Jane Austen's protagonists are all young women for the same presumed reason. To me, the real test is putting yourself in the skin of someone who is different from you and managing to pull that off in a believable way.
May 17, 2020
ThatOneGuy
5/18/20, 9:14 AM
Damn this was hot! Knew it would be though, being from you.
5/18/20, 8:39 AM
Please say there's more to this story! I was hoping Dr Bryant would get dosed, I want to find out how he reacts to the drug. Anyone who's been dosed themselves, I'm a willing depository for your bodily fluids 🤤
5/18/20, 7:53 AM
A great introduction look forward to the next machine experience
5/18/20, 7:40 AM
Awwwww,they are so sweet
Ken
5/18/20, 7:00 AM
Really like the idea and the start. Hope this has a lot of chapters. Can't wait for more.
5/18/20, 6:17 AM
Hot chapter. Can't wait to see more jocks turned.
Muscle-Flex
5/18/20, 4:15 AM
Another hot chapter! I see how the station could present scene opportunities, but also problems. Mikey would have to go under too. Then there are possibilities for he and Huntley to both be in an erotic and mutually embarrassing bind. But does Huntley think it's safe to leave the punk there overnight with only Mikey around? Maybe he needs to take him back to his place for safe-keeping - and the safety of the police station? When does Huntley have to return to duty? The next morning? After the weekend? The punk is ultimately impossible to arrest, so Huntley could be in for a long spell of incidents whenever the punk shows up. Huntley's going to be determined to capture him, but will keep falling prey to the punk's tricks. And it's not like Huntley, in his right mind, is going to want to explain to his chief what this kid has done. And, of course, the punk has video. So, you could have a scene at the station or not, just depending if/when you want to bring Mikey and any other officers into the storyline. Other than that, the scene possibilities are endless!
5/18/20, 4:12 AM
So happy to see more chapters in this story
5/18/20, 4:11 AM
Another idea I had was if Roger is interested in seeing what Phil would do if their positions were swapped. He convinces Phil that Phil is a master hypnotist and that has put Roger under a hypnotic trance. Phil acts like a pervert while still in love with Roger, Roger can end it at any point, and there's a bit of catharsis from seeing how far he's changed Phil while still being able to take him right back. Maybe he even makes suggestions for what Phil "commands" Roger to do.