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5/18/20, 12:27 PM
Actually, with the exception of a few works like Jane Eyre, Victorian novelists loved presenting stories from multiple viewpoints. Think of Dracula, or the epistolary novels of Wilkie Collins, or even Jane Austen's own early epistolary novella "Lady Susan." And don't get me started on novels with multiple embedded narrators, like Emily Bronte's Wuthering Heights. What makes your story a little different from those, I think, is the way you're quickly jumping between different time-frames and locations (and not keeping to a strict chronological order). That aspect feels very cinematic!
Hunter_C_Wolfe@Hotmail.Com
5/18/20, 11:13 AM
Where do I sign up for a session in this device?
5/18/20, 10:56 AM
Thanks, as always, for your positive comments nycboot. I think that jump-cuts are required when multiple viewpoints are involved. It may be to do with the cinema, but I also think that writing has evolved since the Victorian novel when an entire work would be written only from the perspective of the central character. Jane Eyre comes to mind. I think that a modern version of this novel might also include chapters written from the point of view of Rochester and perhaps even Mrs Reed or the mad woman in the attic. I'm not sure that this means that writing is dead. It perhaps means that readers expect to experience issues from more than one viewpoint. There is also a certain skill involved in presenting the perspective of varying characters authentically. Most of Dickens' narrators were young men, rather like he was in his youth. He obviously felt comfortable writing from that viewpoint. Jane Austen's protagonists are all young women for the same presumed reason. To me, the real test is putting yourself in the skin of someone who is different from you and managing to pull that off in a believable way.
May 17, 2020
ThatOneGuy
5/18/20, 9:14 AM
Damn this was hot! Knew it would be though, being from you.
5/18/20, 8:39 AM
Please say there's more to this story! I was hoping Dr Bryant would get dosed, I want to find out how he reacts to the drug. Anyone who's been dosed themselves, I'm a willing depository for your bodily fluids 🤤
5/18/20, 7:53 AM
A great introduction look forward to the next machine experience
5/18/20, 7:40 AM
Awwwww,they are so sweet
Ken
5/18/20, 7:00 AM
Really like the idea and the start. Hope this has a lot of chapters. Can't wait for more.
5/18/20, 6:17 AM
Hot chapter. Can't wait to see more jocks turned.
Muscle-Flex
5/18/20, 4:15 AM
Another hot chapter! I see how the station could present scene opportunities, but also problems. Mikey would have to go under too. Then there are possibilities for he and Huntley to both be in an erotic and mutually embarrassing bind. But does Huntley think it's safe to leave the punk there overnight with only Mikey around? Maybe he needs to take him back to his place for safe-keeping - and the safety of the police station? When does Huntley have to return to duty? The next morning? After the weekend? The punk is ultimately impossible to arrest, so Huntley could be in for a long spell of incidents whenever the punk shows up. Huntley's going to be determined to capture him, but will keep falling prey to the punk's tricks. And it's not like Huntley, in his right mind, is going to want to explain to his chief what this kid has done. And, of course, the punk has video. So, you could have a scene at the station or not, just depending if/when you want to bring Mikey and any other officers into the storyline. Other than that, the scene possibilities are endless!