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5/15/20, 6:02 PM
So, James already know about Eunice??? Or did she just tell him today??? You make me wonder if they are already separated or something like that... it was a long wait (well not that long, but still) but it was worthy... 💙💙💙💙 love it, I can't wait for the next day chapter and how Noah will finally react tl everything that happen and learn in the last day :3
Swizzington
5/15/20, 5:51 PM
I have not read the story you referenced, Hypnothrill, but as a general rule I find stories where the guy at the top of the food chain is also under mind control/hypnotic influences to be boring and pointless. Not to say that there is anything wrong with that approach, it just doesn't do anything for me personally :-) Besides, to suggest that Lane is meant to be a "good guy" is to fundamentally misunderstand what's happening here. Better than Todd? Undoubtedly! Entirely benevolent? Obviously not.
5/15/20, 5:33 PM
I must be the only person who didn't like this ending! Don't get me wrong, I thought the story was extremely well-written, and you do a good job of foreshadowing this resolution in earlier chapters, making it seem like the logical extension of what the Lane character would want if he had total control. But I felt like the story itself was endorsing Lane's solution--keeping the population enslaved and expanding his power as a benevolent puppetmaster--as the most ethical option, and that left a bad taste in my mouth. I know that when I write a story with mass mind-control, some of my readers regard it as a utopia, but I always think of these universes as dystopias, even if my characters are programmed to enjoy their sexual compulsions and enslavement. To me, one of the few (and perhaps only) story to get the "good guy" master mind controller right is Topaz172, with his "Master Troy" character, and that's only because Troy himself is under hypnotic compulsions to be the master that his mind-controlled subjects desire. Maybe next time you write a multi-part story, I should just stop reading a chapter or two before the end--for me, all the erotic bits are in the middle anyway. But you're such a good writer, I keep wanting to read to the end despite myself. Anyway, I hope you won't take this mixed review too harshly!
Hunter_C_Wolfe@Hotmail.Com
5/15/20, 5:20 PM
How cum I never had a room mate like that in college?
5/15/20, 4:24 PM
Honestly I feel hesitant about nycboot writing an ending for The Bargain series. With him constantly proclaiming for good people to win in Swizzington's series, I have a feeling that he will write Ari'Seth's downfall, which would be a disappointing way to end the series. i personally don't like it when a different author finishes an uncompleted story since more often than not, the ghost writer ends up not staying faithful to the story itself, but thats just me. I'm not quite against with what New Guy did though, since its more of a side story that can easily be compartmentalized as opposed to directly changing the canon of Wishbone's story
Swizzington
5/15/20, 4:18 PM
Yeah, I definitely wouldn't rule out a Lane spin-off going forward. Setting that up was the main reason I started writing this sequel in the first place, in fact. But right now it's on the back burner :-)
5/15/20, 4:15 PM
I applaud you for the universe you created. So thrilled to see the newest Mr.Zeiss story Will we hear about Lane and his agenda in future installments? I have a soft spot for mind-controlled politicians
5/15/20, 3:55 PM
I've yet to read the epilogue but I'm already sad that the story is over
5/15/20, 3:54 PM
Finally.. FINALLY!! Hahaha Todd, you lost !!! I'm finally rest in peace Actually I'm a fan of NathanJoe. Even if they're not end up with romantic relationship is fine with me. I just think they don't deserve not fair ending. They're good people... But your story is always hot and fun to read. I will looking forward to seeing the next stories from you~
5/15/20, 3:49 PM
Guilty pleasures are always the best. Well done.