Recent Comments

Swizzington
5/12/20, 5:35 PM
If I were to write something set in a military academy, it would be entirely separate from this story. I am always happy to consider a collaboration, but I will not be ready to start writing anything new for a little while. If you email me we can discuss this further (my email is at the top of pretty much every chapter)
5/12/20, 5:32 PM
Swizzington, I've thought about those aspects of military school as well; it may be a bit impertinent of me to ask but if you're up for it maybe we could collaborate on a military/military academy verison of this. Perhaps Todd taking over a military academy nearby to push his recruits into the service academies (West Point/Annapolis etc.). It has some potential.
5/12/20, 5:28 PM
I definitely like this piece, but this chapter felt short and the assilimation felt a bit hurried; it could've been slowed down and Jake's disorientation could've been made more apparent. But I do want to see where the story goes, so please keep going.
5/12/20, 5:23 PM
Well, I was keeping my options open for your story, but after reading this part, I have to say I'm out on this story. I'm not a fan of the humilation aspect; it just seems to be reveling in it and that is something I can't get behind. I guess it's because I want to strive for something different in my own work with the theme of men in uniform that I just can't get behind this.
Swizzington
5/12/20, 5:23 PM
It will definitely not be today. Tomorrow is possible but somewhat unlikely :-) If not tomorrow, almost certainly the day after.
5/12/20, 5:17 PM
So when you say a little longer till the next chapters what are we talking about? haha. I just want to make sure I am not constantly checking the site.
Swizzington
5/12/20, 4:59 PM
Thank you for your feedback and comments everyone! @bucke, thank you for your suggestion. It is something that could happen, one day. The military aspects do interest me too! Eventually I might write something like that. :-)
AJX
5/12/20, 2:58 PM
Omg yes 5-stars and definitely needs a day-by-day series. This hotel fantasy is just perfect right now. Each room could do something different to new people, would love to see the tops and how they evolve, etc. Really appreciate your writing and hoping for more :)
Doug Kent
5/12/20, 2:08 PM
another chapter
5/12/20, 1:15 PM
I agree with Hypnothrill; the pace of this leg of the story was rushed. You could have taken the time to draw the conversion out. But you have a good story with potential so please continue writing this story.