Recent Comments

5/12/20, 6:18 PM
No problem. I'll definitely send you an e-mail and we can start discussing things.
5/12/20, 6:16 PM
It's your story and as long a you're happy with it then write what you feel. Readers come to stories with their own framework, so keep going with your story.
5/12/20, 5:51 PM
Aww sorry man, I'm the exact opposite! Can't get enough of that stuff, so i guess i went a bit overboard in my own story
Swizzington
5/12/20, 5:35 PM
If I were to write something set in a military academy, it would be entirely separate from this story. I am always happy to consider a collaboration, but I will not be ready to start writing anything new for a little while. If you email me we can discuss this further (my email is at the top of pretty much every chapter)
5/12/20, 5:32 PM
Swizzington, I've thought about those aspects of military school as well; it may be a bit impertinent of me to ask but if you're up for it maybe we could collaborate on a military/military academy verison of this. Perhaps Todd taking over a military academy nearby to push his recruits into the service academies (West Point/Annapolis etc.). It has some potential.
5/12/20, 5:28 PM
I definitely like this piece, but this chapter felt short and the assilimation felt a bit hurried; it could've been slowed down and Jake's disorientation could've been made more apparent. But I do want to see where the story goes, so please keep going.
5/12/20, 5:23 PM
Well, I was keeping my options open for your story, but after reading this part, I have to say I'm out on this story. I'm not a fan of the humilation aspect; it just seems to be reveling in it and that is something I can't get behind. I guess it's because I want to strive for something different in my own work with the theme of men in uniform that I just can't get behind this.
Swizzington
5/12/20, 5:23 PM
It will definitely not be today. Tomorrow is possible but somewhat unlikely :-) If not tomorrow, almost certainly the day after.
5/12/20, 5:17 PM
So when you say a little longer till the next chapters what are we talking about? haha. I just want to make sure I am not constantly checking the site.
Swizzington
5/12/20, 4:59 PM
Thank you for your feedback and comments everyone! @bucke, thank you for your suggestion. It is something that could happen, one day. The military aspects do interest me too! Eventually I might write something like that. :-)