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nycboot
5/12/20, 12:05 AM
Wow. I didn't think you could evoke the emotions in the sequences with Lane's dad and Drew. That was really something - bravo, really moving. And the tiny glimmer of Nathan - after way too many enslavements - stands in stark and very welcomed contrast. I'm just wondering why Lane has given up on Chester, especially when he has one pair of glasses left. And gee, Todd is so unstable - maybe he'll have a nervous breakdown that will permanently disable his brain? Also: was it your intention to draw a parallel to particular autocratic leaders?
Anonymous
5/12/20, 12:05 AM
terrific
5/12/20, 12:03 AM
Wow. This chapter was a gut punch in more ways than one. From the real Nathan breaking free to the stuff about Lane's family...you do such a good job painting this world, Swizzington. :) And who knows what will happen? Lane still has Chester's glasses to protect him from telepaths (I think it takes them twelve hours to recharge, right?), but with Nathan's new powers, will they work? I guess we'll have to wait and see! :D
Ozark
5/12/20, 12:01 AM
please make sequel!
5/11/20, 11:49 PM
Such a good chapter. I just truly don't see Lane ending on top in the end. Maybe somehow his Dad and himself escape town and never vow to talk about what happened. Or somehow Lane and his Dad get put under Todd's control. I know Todd is going to win because of the epilogue of the first story, but I have a feeling something is going to happen that will change everything and it going to go down in the next chapter. Like you said why write a story if everything is going to be the same to start with. I look forward to reading the next chapters in two days. :)
5/11/20, 11:31 PM
Fuck!! That was hot!
Anonymous
5/11/20, 11:10 PM
Excellent
Anonymous
5/11/20, 11:04 PM
This was so hot! I have a total thing for guy's whose nips poke through their shirt, so I definitely enjoyed this :)
Hunter_C_Wolfe@Hotmail.Com
5/11/20, 10:33 PM
A 5 star rating on Tripadvisor for this place.
5/11/20, 10:25 PM
Interesting and promising. To me something is off in the flow of the first nine lines or so (the normal day and the meta bit about people involved in the story) but the rest of it is good. Combining a few paragraphs might have made sense, but, to me at least, the short paragraphs mostly give a nice flavor to the narrator's voice. A cynical narrator and a jock puppy werewolf in what seems to be a sweet tale is a very promising combination. Eagerly waiting for the next chapter.