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Swizzington
5/9/20, 10:15 PM
Hello Kyle Chu. What made you think that Dylan couldn't restore Nathan? I don't remember where I said that in the story.
5/9/20, 10:14 PM
Maybe this was for the best, we lost Dylan but he is dosed at the moment so that’s only Nathan to deal with (and handicapped since he fighting for control), since the first set of Glasses can only deal with a telepath at once it may works on Lane’s favor if he somehow manages to earn enough time for the glasses to recharge. And Lane still has the second pair of glasses, but I don’t think they will be useful on Chester, they’re cornered and with no cover, get Chester back could only do so little for Lane at the current moment, If he uses those on Chester that could end really bad... Edit: forgot to mention it; but these “normal scenario” mindscapes turning into mind controlling traps are just amazing I think the final scene with Dylan swaying and singing his free will away was pretty hot
5/9/20, 10:03 PM
You mindscape scenes are always your strongest work, Swizz. This is definitely one of your biggest chapters. I already told you how I feel about Lane, so I will just gloss over him. So I will focus on the parts of the story that I did enjoy. I like the Joe cameo, I enjoyed his appearance on the mindscape very much. It baffles me at how little we've seen of him, and its such a crime that he is not being used sexually enough. I also like the return of the serum, its good to know that those still exist. And I like the twisted, nursery song sequence. One thing I was confused about was the petrified Nathan. I thought Dylan couldn't restore him since it was Nathan's who accidentally petrified himself so only Nathan can free himself, but somehow, he was able to restore him here. The Jekyll and Hyde thing happening inside Nathan is pretty interesting though. no doubt, he is going to resurface again soon and I cant wait what he does!
5/9/20, 9:04 PM
And so Leo enters the picture and turns Pine's world upside down. He's got both Mikey and Gary shook. This is going to be interesting.
5/9/20, 8:59 PM
Man, Swizzington, you definitely know how to write a rollercoaster story there. The ups and downs, highs and lows, they were all there. It was enjoyable and left us at a very dark moment. But not everything is over. O.G. Nathan is free and Academy Nathan might not be able to hold him down forever (the Legion fan in me holds out for the eventual breakout of O.G. Nathan from whatever mental prison he's in). I'm not like Mr. Anonymous there; I see your story like a game of craps, so far we've have some wins and some losses but the seven-out hasn't hit yet. There's still a chance the point (i.e. good guys winning) can be made, but if the seven-out (Todd winning) comes, it's a loss but won't break the bank overall. Keep going; I'm waiting to see the outcome. P.S. - I personally got a kick of learning that Todd did take over the police force; knowing that has happened has made the outcome a coin flip that I'm happy either way it lands.
Anonymous
5/9/20, 8:18 PM
I saw this coming and now pissed. I knew Todd was going to win but you really had to fucking do this. I am just gonna give up on this series. You can write I will give you that but the story is just not good.
5/9/20, 7:57 PM
This series is one of the hottest things I've ever read, thanks for sharing it
5/9/20, 7:33 PM
Bro, hella hot, bro!
5/9/20, 7:31 PM
that's hot, bro!