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5/8/20, 7:38 PM
Brodacious
May 4, 2020
5/8/20, 7:35 PM
Awesome story, I love how the bully hates what he has to do. I hope there will be even more humiliation. And I really hope that there are some other bullies who need to be disciplined by Nate!
Thom
5/8/20, 7:22 PM
Still waiting on this to happen to me, why must fate be so cruel. Another hot entry as usual, bro.
5/8/20, 6:44 PM
While its true that the events of the six chapters took place in the span of a few hours, the entire sequel is 2/3 close to being done already and for me, Lane has not risen to the occasion and proven himself capable of causing any real damage. So in the event that he does end up coming out on top somehow, it will feel like he only got there through a fluke since that's the only thing thats been happening to Lane as of now. Maybe I'm wrong and maybe Swizz is cooking up something in his later chapters that will make me eat my words (and I won't be surprised if that ends up being the case.) But as it stands, Lane's actions aint cutting it for me and it he doesn't earn any victory points for just stumbling upon Chester's invention and following his instructions.
Ash
5/8/20, 6:39 PM
you should create more in this storyline
5/8/20, 6:21 PM
Love how each of the bros is turning out with a kickass unique personality.
Hunter_C_Wolfe@Hotmail.Com
5/8/20, 5:53 PM
Very interesting theme indeed. Points for being original.
Zac
5/8/20, 5:43 PM
Fuck, bro...
Anonymous
5/8/20, 5:14 PM
filipino here! this is so funnyyyy i love it! more power hahaha
Swizzington
5/8/20, 4:10 PM
Gotta remember that the events of the last several chapters have literally all taken place over the span of a few hours. You're not going to see every side of Lane's character in that time, nor would you expect him to have figured out some master plan so quickly. He is being buffeted by external forces because, let's face it, what else is he going to do? He's not a telepath. He's not a genius. He's not a superhero. He's just a guy trying to figure things out. Lane escaped from the Herald within a minute of them entering, because he already knew what was coming. He knew the danger. The rest of the employees there had absolutely no idea. Would you flee the second you saw some teenage twerps come in to your place of work? As was mentioned in the story, a few of them *did* react once they realized something was wrong, but by that point it was too late. They were overpowered. What's 'cartoonish' about this exactly? Ultimately, the entire story is cliche to an extent. I never pretended otherwise. Just seems silly to latch on to that specific part as being the only issue. The idea of making Chester the protagonist would never (in my mind, at least) work. For one, Chester is far smarter than Todd to the point where if he were still active and had actual agency in the plot, this would be over several chapters ago. It was necessary for him to be neutralized if you wanted this story to go on longer than 3 chapters :-) Moreover, *because* Chester is of such intelligence, he would never fall prey to the "absolute power corrupts" trope. He just wants to be left alone to tinker with his inventions and accumulate new knowledge. It has been my observation that most true intellectuals are rarely enticed by power over others.