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5/8/20, 6:21 PM
Love how each of the bros is turning out with a kickass unique personality.
Hunter_C_Wolfe@Hotmail.Com
5/8/20, 5:53 PM
Very interesting theme indeed. Points for being original.
Zac
5/8/20, 5:43 PM
Fuck, bro...
Anonymous
5/8/20, 5:14 PM
filipino here! this is so funnyyyy i love it! more power hahaha
Swizzington
5/8/20, 4:10 PM
Gotta remember that the events of the last several chapters have literally all taken place over the span of a few hours. You're not going to see every side of Lane's character in that time, nor would you expect him to have figured out some master plan so quickly. He is being buffeted by external forces because, let's face it, what else is he going to do? He's not a telepath. He's not a genius. He's not a superhero. He's just a guy trying to figure things out. Lane escaped from the Herald within a minute of them entering, because he already knew what was coming. He knew the danger. The rest of the employees there had absolutely no idea. Would you flee the second you saw some teenage twerps come in to your place of work? As was mentioned in the story, a few of them *did* react once they realized something was wrong, but by that point it was too late. They were overpowered. What's 'cartoonish' about this exactly? Ultimately, the entire story is cliche to an extent. I never pretended otherwise. Just seems silly to latch on to that specific part as being the only issue. The idea of making Chester the protagonist would never (in my mind, at least) work. For one, Chester is far smarter than Todd to the point where if he were still active and had actual agency in the plot, this would be over several chapters ago. It was necessary for him to be neutralized if you wanted this story to go on longer than 3 chapters :-) Moreover, *because* Chester is of such intelligence, he would never fall prey to the "absolute power corrupts" trope. He just wants to be left alone to tinker with his inventions and accumulate new knowledge. It has been my observation that most true intellectuals are rarely enticed by power over others.
5/8/20, 3:52 PM
I'm not criticizing Lane's motivation in the story, I'm pointing out his incompetency in his role as adversary. I feel like Lane's action is dictated more by the plot instead of him being the one to move the plot forward. He literally has Dylan and Chester's hologram telling what to do next. Go here, go there, run away. He relies too much on external forces instead of hatching his own plans. Personally, I feel like it would've been better to have Chester as Todd's main adversary of this story as opposed to Lane. The confrontation with Dylan and his enslavement could've happened to him instead and he could be the one who's having the "absolute power corrupts absolutely" character arc that Lane is having right now and it would've played put much better since Chester is an actual threat to Todd's cause.
Thom
5/8/20, 3:21 PM
Hey, if anyone wants to do this to me, by all means, hit me up, bro
Anonymous
5/8/20, 2:53 PM
Funny ending!!
5/8/20, 12:07 PM
INCREDIBLE! Your rich descriptions of the lighthouse and beautiful language made me feel like I was really there, and the power of Cthulhu was real, too. Amazing job!
nycboot
5/8/20, 11:11 AM
Kyle Chu: but reread how Lane is introduced. He is *never* painted as all-positive, but just as power-hungry as Todd. I'm all for Lane's cause of freeing up people, and he's that tool in the narrative. But his personality is driven by selfishness and self-aggrandizement. That's why I fear he's going to end up like Ethan of the Good Boy story. In a sense, this kind of chain-link corruption is the story of our times, is it not?