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5/8/20, 3:34 AM
@PupScout: I'm glad I could pass a word on to you. You're right to notice the ways boot camps or police academies work; they are breaking people's will down and rebuilding them as soldier/sailors/airmen/Marines/police officers. You've been a bit more hip to that particular game than I have as it appears in your stories, so you seeing that in the story is really nice to hear. Thank you for noticing the appreciation of the uniform. I really did want to go for the antithesis of disrobing; from your opinion I got the right tone which is good to hear. I'm not such a good writer of sex and sensuality, so I'm really happy to hear you liked the uniform being central to the transformation. Wow!! The author of the Submarine and Navy Seals Brothers actually would go to the infantry??!! Then that leaves the navy blue for me; definitely would sign up for navy if I had to enlist. But I'm honored that you commented on the story; thank you so much, PupScout.
5/8/20, 3:18 AM
It's one of those "move the plot forward" chapters. Not particularly my favorite as I find the action too chaotic. I like your more condensed chapters where the focus don't jump around on too many locations and scenes and we just follow one character's progression in the plot (i.e. Nathan's training, a specific victim's downfall, Todd's plotting, etc.) I also don't know how to feel about The Herald scene. It feels cartoonishly cliche for the bad guy to not be able to catch Lane considering that he managed to take over the place but still unable to incapacitate Lane despite the number of slaves he has at his disposal. It feels like Lane is getting away because the plot says hes not ready for the big battle. I just feel that Lane needs to have more skills I guess in order to be considered a worth adversary for Todd. Cuz right now, all his victories had been a stroke of luck (stealing the glasses by luck, not being reprimanded in the early chapters when he was sleuthing around the school). It wont make for a compelling ending if he somehow defeats Todd because so far, his major victories were not due to his own merit but through Chester's invention that he only came upon by some happenstance. He needs to prove himself as someone worthy! Still looking forward to the next chapter though, waiting for everything to come clashing together with the inevitable boom.
5/8/20, 3:03 AM
Man Butch calling Aaron sir was so nice <3
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5/8/20, 2:22 AM
Actually Swizz, since you've already alluded to a showdown....I'm wondering about a scene: Dylan has already released Nathan and they sneak up to Todd and stick both their fingers simultaneously at Todd's temple. Then follows a 3-way mindscape with the three of them arguing. If it could be as interesting as the Drew/Dylan scene, it might be something.
May 7, 2020
Anonymous
5/8/20, 2:19 AM
OOoooooo You can go so far with this, and I hope you do!!!
Anonymous
5/8/20, 2:16 AM
Can't wait for more!
Anonymous
5/8/20, 2:14 AM
Love when you get real specific about what there wearing bro. Bet all those bros smell good with all that flexing like sweat and stuff mixed with Axe and cheap colone...
5/8/20, 2:02 AM
I gotta admit, I'm extremely disappointed that you wrote 8 parts and never actually wrote the satisfying 'Alpha mating his bottom' anal sex scene. At the risk of sounding like a petty asshole, I can truly say I wish I hadn't wasted my time reading this. I would like to state for the record that I am in fact NOT an asshole, that's just truly the level of hurt I feel right now.
Anonymous
5/8/20, 1:19 AM
So hot. Thank you!
5/8/20, 12:52 AM
I learned a new word today: doppelganger. Thanks for that. The uniform makes them obedient soldiers. In real life this is exactly what happens, but they join voluntarily, get a uniform , form a squad and start obeying. That this fantasy is so close to reality is super hot. Makes you wonder the mindset of our men in uniform, esp the super elite forces. And I loved how the uniform was so central. Wearing it well, looking like a man in it, respecting it, it was a nice transformation for him to consider and appreciate manliness. And then joining others with the same transformation. Now to answer the question I have been nagging myself with throughout this story. Desert? Urban? Navy Blue? or Olive Drab? I choose the Olive Drab Sir!