Recent Comments

Tass
5/7/20, 12:24 PM
like it a lot. change him some more, perhaps a crazy haircut, tattoos and piercings to go with the new look
5/7/20, 11:39 AM
Great start. Eager for more.
5/7/20, 11:39 AM
This is a really good starting point though a bit short. I personally seek out these kinds of stories. Will there be any continuity?
5/7/20, 11:26 AM
loved the story! would love for you to write more where the subject was aware of the changes like with alex
5/7/20, 9:49 AM
Hottest chapter of the series!!
5/7/20, 8:48 AM
The story is hot and, although the idea is not that original, I liked it. However - it would be much better if your sentences were a lot shorter. Having too many ideas in one sentence confuses the reader and makes it hard to follow the story. Let's take your first sentence. This has nine ideas in it! 1. You are normal. 2. Boring. 3. A human. 4. A loner. 5. You got made fun of. 6. You are a 'rubberist'. 7. You wear rubber. 8. Your clothing choice is the reason you are a loner. 9. One night everything changed. It's really difficult for readers to take in more than two or three ideas per sentence. So, I suggest you break things up a little by using more full stops.
5/7/20, 8:33 AM
I really loved the "call-and-response" scene towards the end with the new recruits. I felt like there were a couple of points where you got a little too caught up in the homage to Talmak's story, like that whole exchange about whether the BDU cost $45 or $60.
Anonymous
5/7/20, 8:10 AM
Awesome story! And i second Elm's comment, this site needs more Orcs
5/7/20, 8:07 AM
There's just nothing I could say to describe how hot, insanely well written and rather emotional this chapter was. Great fucking job man I will say, having butch blindfolded, handcuffed and calling a much younger and much smaller guy sir is definitely the highlight of this entire story which makes me realise how sad it is that Aaron is so damn vanilla.
Anonymous
5/7/20, 7:41 AM
I think the sad outweighed the horny for me :( Well written though.