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Swizzington
5/5/20, 9:50 PM
It's more the fact that he was being forced to control someone against his conscious will. Of course, we have seen Dylan enslave many people before this, but that was always when either a) he was in control of himself, or b) he was brainwashed by Todd to be enthusiastic about it and/or believe it to be necessary. This was the first time we have seen a mind controller be *forced* into the mind control against their own objections by some underlying programming in their subconscious. And this was the result, something we hadn't seen before :-) If he were mentally on board (either through more thorough brainwashing or just by believing it to be a good idea) with the controlling of other people again, he would presumably still be able to control the scene.
Anonymous
5/5/20, 9:38 PM
First of all, congratulation again another amazing story! It was hot how Dylan was also part of the transformation fantasy and not controlling his actions. Could that be a side effect of the Chad's program? Does that mean every time he uses his power he will get affected too, reinforce his program and become more loyal to the resistance and therefore to his leader Lane? At least that was the feeling I got, and wish its true. I'd like to see Dylan under Lane's control permanently. Please update more soon!
Anonymous
5/5/20, 9:37 PM
Excellent!!
Anonymous
5/5/20, 9:30 PM
So far I am loving it. I guess we will see how it goes but my guess because of the epilogue for the original story Todd will end up finding out and will put a stop to it with Nathan and things will go back to somehow the way they were. Some little changes made but Todd will still be in control. I do love Lane and him loving the power he has, hopefully soon he will fully take over Chester and Dylan. But we shall see.
5/5/20, 9:28 PM
incredible
Lusty Stallion
5/5/20, 9:28 PM
Thanks for the feedback. What would make him more hateable/likeable. i havent really developed his chsrachter much. I take your feedback seriously guys. Anyone liking it? when I moced away from pics to develop more of the pros, folk asked for pics. When I put pics folk ask for no pics. More thoughts?
nycboot
5/5/20, 9:27 PM
Wow - this is what you needed - another mindscape, yes, but one so different from the others, one with practically its own plot, that it's very refreshing. One thing that bothers me (even though I've gotten over it). A major part of the initial series was told from Nathan's point of view. We know his true personality is locked away. Are you just going to abandon that or are you going to let his personality return and resume his point of view? It's one thing to plan a story from multiple viewpoints (like Amy Tan's book **The Joy Luck Club** or the film **Rashomon**), but it turns out sloppy unless this was planned from the outset. I don't like to predict endings, but you've planted so many hints that I suspect Lane will turn out like Ethan in the Good Boy series.
Swizzington
5/5/20, 9:10 PM
Yeah, I am aware that it's a lot of Drew so far. You don't need to worry about that going forward :-)
5/5/20, 9:02 PM
Woooohoooo another update! I can't with the build up. I just want Todd and Lane to clash already! I've never said this before but Dylan is my favorite character on thi series. I'm curious to see whats happening with him since something clearly happened in his head after he took control of Drew. I hope he stays subservient to someone in the coming chapters since he's not as fun with a free will. I'm hoping that we get to see some new fresh meat enslaved soon. If Drew just gets keep getting passed over back and forth, it will get repetitive very fast. Thats just my minor criticism at the moment but other than that I'm a very happy camper. Thanks Swizz!
Anonymous
5/5/20, 8:16 PM
This was so hot!!! I love it. Please please make more! I loved how we read about James bubble butt.... maybe in the next one Noah will eat it. Or Noah will tell James to eat his hole out like he's eating his wife