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5/5/20, 10:37 PM
Forgot to mention that, Swizz. The double inception of Dylan being mind controlled to mind control someone was a stroke of genius that I havent read on this site. That was so hot tooo! Hopefully there's more of that. And yes, I agree above the commentor above. I love reading other people's opinions here and how many different ones there are! You have quite the dedicated fans.
Anonymous
5/5/20, 10:32 PM
On thing I love about reading this series is the comment section. Soo many different opinions and ways people think the story can go. It is a lot of fun duking it out in the comments and seeing what everyone thinks.
5/5/20, 10:10 PM
he is a really nasty person, he has no standards, he has no issues in trample over people to get what he wants, he is messing with people lives just to have his fun, that other characters were nice enough to just punish people who deserved and helped the ones they could, Collin is only out for himself
Swizzington
5/5/20, 9:50 PM
It's more the fact that he was being forced to control someone against his conscious will. Of course, we have seen Dylan enslave many people before this, but that was always when either a) he was in control of himself, or b) he was brainwashed by Todd to be enthusiastic about it and/or believe it to be necessary. This was the first time we have seen a mind controller be *forced* into the mind control against their own objections by some underlying programming in their subconscious. And this was the result, something we hadn't seen before :-) If he were mentally on board (either through more thorough brainwashing or just by believing it to be a good idea) with the controlling of other people again, he would presumably still be able to control the scene.
Anonymous
5/5/20, 9:38 PM
First of all, congratulation again another amazing story! It was hot how Dylan was also part of the transformation fantasy and not controlling his actions. Could that be a side effect of the Chad's program? Does that mean every time he uses his power he will get affected too, reinforce his program and become more loyal to the resistance and therefore to his leader Lane? At least that was the feeling I got, and wish its true. I'd like to see Dylan under Lane's control permanently. Please update more soon!
Anonymous
5/5/20, 9:37 PM
Excellent!!
Anonymous
5/5/20, 9:30 PM
So far I am loving it. I guess we will see how it goes but my guess because of the epilogue for the original story Todd will end up finding out and will put a stop to it with Nathan and things will go back to somehow the way they were. Some little changes made but Todd will still be in control. I do love Lane and him loving the power he has, hopefully soon he will fully take over Chester and Dylan. But we shall see.
5/5/20, 9:28 PM
incredible
Lusty Stallion
5/5/20, 9:28 PM
Thanks for the feedback. What would make him more hateable/likeable. i havent really developed his chsrachter much. I take your feedback seriously guys. Anyone liking it? when I moced away from pics to develop more of the pros, folk asked for pics. When I put pics folk ask for no pics. More thoughts?
nycboot
5/5/20, 9:27 PM
Wow - this is what you needed - another mindscape, yes, but one so different from the others, one with practically its own plot, that it's very refreshing. One thing that bothers me (even though I've gotten over it). A major part of the initial series was told from Nathan's point of view. We know his true personality is locked away. Are you just going to abandon that or are you going to let his personality return and resume his point of view? It's one thing to plan a story from multiple viewpoints (like Amy Tan's book **The Joy Luck Club** or the film **Rashomon**), but it turns out sloppy unless this was planned from the outset. I don't like to predict endings, but you've planted so many hints that I suspect Lane will turn out like Ethan in the Good Boy series.