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nycboot
5/5/20, 9:27 PM
Wow - this is what you needed - another mindscape, yes, but one so different from the others, one with practically its own plot, that it's very refreshing. One thing that bothers me (even though I've gotten over it). A major part of the initial series was told from Nathan's point of view. We know his true personality is locked away. Are you just going to abandon that or are you going to let his personality return and resume his point of view? It's one thing to plan a story from multiple viewpoints (like Amy Tan's book **The Joy Luck Club** or the film **Rashomon**), but it turns out sloppy unless this was planned from the outset. I don't like to predict endings, but you've planted so many hints that I suspect Lane will turn out like Ethan in the Good Boy series.
Swizzington
5/5/20, 9:10 PM
Yeah, I am aware that it's a lot of Drew so far. You don't need to worry about that going forward :-)
5/5/20, 9:02 PM
Woooohoooo another update! I can't with the build up. I just want Todd and Lane to clash already! I've never said this before but Dylan is my favorite character on thi series. I'm curious to see whats happening with him since something clearly happened in his head after he took control of Drew. I hope he stays subservient to someone in the coming chapters since he's not as fun with a free will. I'm hoping that we get to see some new fresh meat enslaved soon. If Drew just gets keep getting passed over back and forth, it will get repetitive very fast. Thats just my minor criticism at the moment but other than that I'm a very happy camper. Thanks Swizz!
Anonymous
5/5/20, 8:16 PM
This was so hot!!! I love it. Please please make more! I loved how we read about James bubble butt.... maybe in the next one Noah will eat it. Or Noah will tell James to eat his hole out like he's eating his wife
Hello coach
5/5/20, 7:08 PM
Hello coach I want to be yours next !
5/5/20, 6:39 PM
This just gets better with every chapter. I've never got so worked up reading and you leave us on a cliff edge which I know will blow me off whey the next chapter comes. I defo would pay for this. Great writing.
Swizzington
5/5/20, 6:24 PM
Just a minor point I noted at the very beginning that didn't strike me as realistic. I realize I'm nitpicking and it's not that important, but here goes: Why would a bunch of college students, at least one of whom is an art history major, be apathetic and bored at a museum? Whatever this class is, presumably it must be an elective. While I have no doubt one or two might be bored, you'd think most of them would be into that sort of thing, otherwise they never would have chosen the class to begin with. And in my experience, even if they weren't enjoying it, they would pretend they were to seem more intellectual, lol. And personally, I love museums and art galleries :D
Hunter_C_Wolfe@Hotmail.Com
5/5/20, 6:19 PM
We need an address to check this out ourselves.
5/5/20, 6:18 PM
This bleeping quarantine has forced most to stay at home. Using this free time, I went back to some of my other stories and, where I saw a sequel, I wrote one. I also added some chapters to installment series. I'll post in due course. I hope you enjoy!
5/5/20, 6:18 PM
This bleeping quarantine has forced most to stay at home. Using this free time, I went back to some of my other stories and, where I saw a sequel, I wrote one. I also added some chapters to installment series. I'll post in due course. I hope you enjoy!