Recent Comments

Anonymous
5/4/20, 12:05 AM
Ok here we go. This is what I was expecting from the series. Although I do suspect things will go wrong and Todd will end up back in control. At least we have some conflict/some resistance to it all.
Anonymous
5/3/20, 11:26 PM
would love to see more chapters. very well written
Anonymous
5/3/20, 11:04 PM
still loving this!! can't wait for more
EntrancedGay92
5/3/20, 10:34 PM
As soon as I read the description about this being a school dad attended, I got hard. I hope it's revealed how the father was still be subliminally controlled by the Academy all these years. Nice work.
Ozark
5/3/20, 10:10 PM
cant wait for for part 7
5/3/20, 9:05 PM
I love the lurid dramatic transformations
5/3/20, 8:37 PM
For a first erotic story, this is of an insanely high standard (and I will rate it as such) and I want to give you some extended feedback too. I loved the wrestling stuff the most. I was in heaven reading it. Good flow, really hot. The sex didn't go in a direction that interested me (and that's on *me*, thus, I will not be reflecting that in my rating). The lore of the 'static tick', and how it changes it's recipient was nice, and I liked that the hero (and by proxy the reader) experience it *before* having it explained to them explicitly, after the fact. Quibbles & things to think about; Your descriptive writing/ornamentation at the start was WAAY too flowery! You chilled the beans after a paragraph or two, and then the writing started to read like you're a natural who's been doing this for years. 8 inch dick? 10~12 inch dick? Like really? Imagining that took me out of the story. It seemed 'needlessly ludicrous'. Xavier explaining the lore behind his family could have been less explicitly, perfectly explained in long form, and more just 'commented on to Davy-boy'. We've already read/experienced it's effect on David, there's no need to hold Xavier's character to ransom in the middle of the main sex scene to explain his family's lore *that* clearly.
5/3/20, 8:14 PM
Great to hear that my advice was incorporated so quickly into the story; I'm looking forward to seeing where you go with this.
Anonymous
5/3/20, 7:55 PM
Great introduction. I hope to hear some of those triggers used soon