Recent Comments

5/3/20, 8:14 PM
Great to hear that my advice was incorporated so quickly into the story; I'm looking forward to seeing where you go with this.
Anonymous
5/3/20, 7:55 PM
Great introduction. I hope to hear some of those triggers used soon
Anonymous
5/3/20, 7:40 PM
Woohoo sounds good - going to be refreshing until its released
Anonymous
5/3/20, 7:16 PM
Good introduction. I hope the dad shows up again later and get played with :Q
5/3/20, 7:12 PM
Can't wait to see where this goes!
5/3/20, 6:50 PM
I wasn't given enough about why the characters were *both* straight, but *both* wound up having gay sex, on a gay porn shoot, and loved it and instantly fell passionately in love with each other. Especially Adam, who is presented as 'the experienced one'. What, is he a straight-and-married, experienced gay porn actor, who is straight? It all seemed too unnatural and raises too many questions. For a non-native speaker, your grammar and writing is better then mine. ;)
Feb 3, 2020
Anonymous
5/3/20, 6:45 PM
i really hope you continue. this was a great start with lots of potential!
5/3/20, 6:33 PM
I have changed the triggers because I agreed with *New Guy In Town*'s point about the triggers not fitting with the setting of the story. "Bad boy" has become "penalty", "Good boy" is now "Glory", "Bitch boy" has been changed into "Omega", and "Slut Boy" has been replaced by "Alpha." To make sure everyone is aware I am using a trigger I decided to use italics. If someone has any thoughts/opinions on this, I would love to hear them!
5/3/20, 6:14 PM
Hey New Guy in Town, I think your point about the triggers is valid! I will think about maybe changing them! I liked the repetition of "boy" to make sure that it was very obvious when a trigger was being used. However, you're right about it being rather childish and/or not sophisticated!