Recent Comments

Anonymous
5/3/20, 7:16 PM
Good introduction. I hope the dad shows up again later and get played with :Q
5/3/20, 7:12 PM
Can't wait to see where this goes!
5/3/20, 6:50 PM
I wasn't given enough about why the characters were *both* straight, but *both* wound up having gay sex, on a gay porn shoot, and loved it and instantly fell passionately in love with each other. Especially Adam, who is presented as 'the experienced one'. What, is he a straight-and-married, experienced gay porn actor, who is straight? It all seemed too unnatural and raises too many questions. For a non-native speaker, your grammar and writing is better then mine. ;)
Feb 3, 2020
Anonymous
5/3/20, 6:45 PM
i really hope you continue. this was a great start with lots of potential!
5/3/20, 6:33 PM
I have changed the triggers because I agreed with *New Guy In Town*'s point about the triggers not fitting with the setting of the story. "Bad boy" has become "penalty", "Good boy" is now "Glory", "Bitch boy" has been changed into "Omega", and "Slut Boy" has been replaced by "Alpha." To make sure everyone is aware I am using a trigger I decided to use italics. If someone has any thoughts/opinions on this, I would love to hear them!
5/3/20, 6:14 PM
Hey New Guy in Town, I think your point about the triggers is valid! I will think about maybe changing them! I liked the repetition of "boy" to make sure that it was very obvious when a trigger was being used. However, you're right about it being rather childish and/or not sophisticated!
5/3/20, 6:04 PM
I generally like the idea, but bitch boy and slut boy as triggers seems out of place for the air of sophistication the Academy is supposed to have. Equally good boy and bad boy seem a bit too childish for the atmosphere of this Academy. If the Greek and Roman idea is at work it should be reflected in the triggers.
5/3/20, 5:17 PM
Love it! Can't believe it's back already!
Swizzington
5/3/20, 5:10 PM
Thank you to everyone for sharing your thoughts. I appreciate that so many people are invested in the story ! I intend to have the next chapter up later today. While the story is already written, I like to go back over each part and fine-tune them just before I publish, and that is what I will be doing with Chapter 4 this afternoon :-)
Dave Dastard
5/3/20, 4:25 PM
just popping in to say how much I love the series. the plot's intriguing to me. i actually think Todd is sexy so I like the dynamic of him potentially winning as the villain. his humiliating tactics are so great (for example, I love all the curtsying and bowing). thanks for putting in the hard work of layering the story with so many characters and hypnotic take downs, Swizz. you're the best. please dont make me wait too long refreshing this page to see when a new one's posted. lol.