This is a great story, and while i enjoyed it, i can't help but feel that Greg is being kinda a stalker and that he won't have a happy ending, which is a pity. thanks for the constant updates

Great idea - a bit on the fast side, but very intriguing. Are you going to write further installments?

💙💙💙💙💙 I love it, your work is always amazing!!!!!! I can't wait for the next chapter :3

nycboot, I think it is a little premature to judge the WHOLE story. Swizzington has proved again and again that he can manipulate the plot in surprising ways--again, there was a genuine debate in Chapter 9 of "Slave Academy's" comment section about what the ending would be, and the ending of "How to be a Good Boy" had a ton of surprises (the father resisting control, and almost winning, then losing--and then the psychiatrist's son turning the tables with his subdermal protection unit, for example). As for the "too many enslavements," we've really only seen three in the story so far: Jasper's, Drew's "realignment," and Chester's, and of those two, we only got a full picture of Drew's. I think it is an important bit of worldbuilding to show just how powerful Todd has become. Another important "golden rule" among creatives is **show, don't tell.** If Swizzington wrote "Todd enslaved everyone who came his way," and only focused on Lane (who I guess will be the main character of the story), we would complain that it was not realistic. By showing us the extent of Todd's powers, we understand the stakes. Worldbuilding is an important part of the plot! I agree with you that Todd is a horrible little jerk, and I'm hoping he gets blown up by a land mine, personally. :p But I have also really enjoyed seeing the picture of a changing world--the kind of "natural progression" of a powerful mind controller. So many of the stories on this site fall into two categories--the aftermath of a world of mind control (Hypnothrill is the king of that, for example, and dear Wesley Bracken's alternate worlds are gorgeous), or a quick beginning and ending of the process (I think of Willie Cici and Derek Williams as masters of that trope). I think Swizzington is doing something really cool by showing us the "in-between": a world in the middle of its transformation, moving from one model of lifestyle to another. Swizzington is free to write what he wants, and that means we are free to read what we want. :D I hope that he continues to write this story!

Thank you for your detailed feedback, nycboot. Regrettably, I cannot really respond to much of what you said directly without potentially revealing plot spoilers :-)

Interesting plot twists!!

Well done. And hot!!!

I have to pretty much agree with the first anonymous comment (and you'll recall I've posted similarly in the previous Slave Academy). You definitely know the technique of writing a story, no question about that. But the relentless inevitability of every aspect of the story is frustrating and disappointing. After a while it ceases to be surprising or interesting. You've now shown us so many enslavements that it's lost its efficacy. Everything is so predictable (we know Lane's enslavement is coming soon), that even the "Easter Eggs" (we know that Nathan's true personality is locked away) will probably not result in any change. The conflict is ongoing and never ceases, so much so that we don't even sense there's a conflict anymore. That's why works like the film PSYCHO (1960) does the right thing - you're shown two violent murders and you expect more. Similarly JAWS (1975) after the first scene you're on edge for the remainder of the film. Most creative people will tell you the golden rule "**Less is more**." Ok, so you want to experiment and keep dousing us with enslavement after enslavement. One problem you'll face is balance - will the denouement achieve a balance of the build up? I and apparently others didn't think you were successful with the Good Boy story - while the trick ending was a fun surprise it did not meet the needs of a resolution. Of course it's your story and you can do anything you want with it. But I hope you'll consider of some of these issues if you really want to achieve a satisfying story. (Personally I still hope someone has the ability to literally smash Todd's skull. My second choice would be that he get run over by a truck. He's been made into such a terrible person - and continues to increase that quality - that anything less than death would be extremely disappointing.) P.S. I was thinking of another example of overdoing it - and all the Harry Potter stories are good examples. All the books are 700-800 pages long, but there's only 100 pages of actual plot in them. By the time you hit the 3rd book, you know her (weak) technique and the rest becomes tedium. One recognizes the descriptions do almost nothing to forward the plot but are purely padding. Please don't fall into that trap.

Awesome!! Love all of the styles!!!

Thank you for your thoughts, Kyle Chu! To your last point, I would say that Todd feels he doesn't need a big, brutish bodyguard when he has Nathan's telepathic powers to protect him. As we move forward, you will notice that Nathan very rarely leaves Todd's side much these days. :-) I thought about including Chester's mindscape scene but...I don't think it would have been interesting, honestly. There was nothing hot or fun about it. It would have just been us witnessing Nathan, under Todd's orders, completely obliterating the guy's mind and personality. No build up, no excitement, no dialogue. Just kinda...sad.... I think it's funner to just see the before and after of him transformed, without all the messy stuff in between. You are, of course, welcome to disagree!