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Swizzington
5/2/20, 10:09 PM
@anonymous poster above 'New Guy in Town': Yeah, I agree the mindscapes have the most potential for hotness and excitement. And coming into this story, I knew I had written myself into a little bit of a corner with Todd's power loss, because it was his sadistic nature that led to those scenes being so different. He wanted to come up with new, innovative ways to torture and enslave people. Dylan and Nathan on the other hand, the ones now making the slaves, are of course also enthralled themselves, so it's reasonable to expect that their methods of control are more efficient and pragmatic. They aren't doing it for pleasure, like Todd was. With that being said, we will see several more mindscape scenes throughout the story, and hopefully you will enjoy some of them :-) @everyone else commenting here: Thank you for your support! I am glad to see so many people interested and enjoying the story. :-)
5/2/20, 9:49 PM
Thank you to all three writers for writing a really nice story; it's really cool to see this type of collaboration. Maybe this could be the basis of a writing contest. But it was really enjoyable to see the story advance through different styles and techniques. Please do this again if you all have the time.
5/2/20, 9:41 PM
man i need more of this asap. your a creative writer thanks :)
5/2/20, 9:34 PM
@Swizzington: Another great chapter of the story; looking forward to the next part. @Anonymous: I don't think you understand what this chapter does to advance the story. In this chapter we have three potential threats to Todd's dominion. First is Chester's plan; while Todd makes Chester into a drone it can be undone with a pair of glasses in the very residence where Todd resides. So a threat to Todd lies in the very building he occupies and rules things from. Second is Drew; much like Chester, Drew has been brought back under Todd's control and yet there is the chance that he might remember Chester's warning and carry out Chester's plan. Finally, Quincy reveals that the glasses are the key to maintaining Todd's control. Nathan and Dylan can create the prisons that make a person Todd slave, but the glasses are the actual means of keeping someone in that prison. We thought that might be the case when Drew's glasses were broken but now we see a clear example of it in Quincy. So we have three potential threats plus, as Feed Your Head points out, Lane and his undercover investigation. So threats abound to Todd and his reign, the ones he sees seem to have been put down but have not really gone away. And he hasn't met Lane yet. So like Moose says, there can't be a resistance right out the gate; it has to be built and build itself up.
Anonymous
5/2/20, 9:32 PM
swizz your story is great. your writing is fantastic. and while the way you tell your story may not be the exact way i or someone else would picture or would have chosen thats the beauty of art (even on a "kink site"). please continue to write and contribute to the site there are many that love your work. if i may a little request. the mindscaping parts are in my opinion the hottest parts your creativity and breakdown of the boys losing their will is very erotic and could be even longer and focused. there is the freedom of not being in reality that lets you do really anything. either way always excited for whats in store next.
Anonymous
5/2/20, 9:09 PM
Looking forward to seeing where the next 5 charpters take us, I thought the majority of this would be looking at Chester but it seems like it has been closed out! Exciting to read when you post!
5/2/20, 9:04 PM
I loved it to death! Please continue this great story and your great work!
Ryan. R
5/2/20, 8:58 PM
Maybe anonymous needs to have a meeting with todd :p Yes I liked this chapter. In all honesty not my favourite but still a good read with some interesting ideas. Not every chapter is gana float everyone's boat and that is completely fine. Swizz one thing I want to say is that I think (and I think most people also have this opinion!) you do have well thought out stories and you do have substance in your writing! Thank you for writing this, it's very much appreciated!!
5/2/20, 8:58 PM
This may be one of my favorite chapters yet. I absolutely love the way that the pledges are fighting both the external threat of Carl and the internal threat of their desperate desire to submit. I would have th exact same dilemma, and I can’t wait to see all the hot things that happen next.