I have to pretty much agree with the first anonymous comment (and you'll recall I've posted similarly in the previous Slave Academy). You definitely know the technique of writing a story, no question about that. But the relentless inevitability of every aspect of the story is frustrating and disappointing. After a while it ceases to be surprising or interesting. You've now shown us so many enslavements that it's lost its efficacy. Everything is so predictable (we know Lane's enslavement is coming soon), that even the "Easter Eggs" (we know that Nathan's true personality is locked away) will probably not result in any change. The conflict is ongoing and never ceases, so much so that we don't even sense there's a conflict anymore. That's why works like the film PSYCHO (1960) does the right thing - you're shown two violent murders and you expect more. Similarly JAWS (1975) after the first scene you're on edge for the remainder of the film. Most creative people will tell you the golden rule "**Less is more**." Ok, so you want to experiment and keep dousing us with enslavement after enslavement. One problem you'll face is balance - will the denouement achieve a balance of the build up? I and apparently others didn't think you were successful with the Good Boy story - while the trick ending was a fun surprise it did not meet the needs of a resolution. Of course it's your story and you can do anything you want with it. But I hope you'll consider of some of these issues if you really want to achieve a satisfying story. (Personally I still hope someone has the ability to literally smash Todd's skull. My second choice would be that he get run over by a truck. He's been made into such a terrible person - and continues to increase that quality - that anything less than death would be extremely disappointing.) P.S. I was thinking of another example of overdoing it - and all the Harry Potter stories are good examples. All the books are 700-800 pages long, but there's only 100 pages of actual plot in them. By the time you hit the 3rd book, you know her (weak) technique and the rest becomes tedium. One recognizes the descriptions do almost nothing to forward the plot but are purely padding. Please don't fall into that trap.

Awesome!! Love all of the styles!!!

Thank you for your thoughts, Kyle Chu! To your last point, I would say that Todd feels he doesn't need a big, brutish bodyguard when he has Nathan's telepathic powers to protect him. As we move forward, you will notice that Nathan very rarely leaves Todd's side much these days. :-) I thought about including Chester's mindscape scene but...I don't think it would have been interesting, honestly. There was nothing hot or fun about it. It would have just been us witnessing Nathan, under Todd's orders, completely obliterating the guy's mind and personality. No build up, no excitement, no dialogue. Just kinda...sad.... I think it's funner to just see the before and after of him transformed, without all the messy stuff in between. You are, of course, welcome to disagree!

please continue! let the doctor milk him.

Now to my actual thoughts on this story, the biggest highlights for me are: a) the mindscape scene with Drew. I love the whole self inducing reprogramming that Nathan dis to him. b) Quincy's little outburst during the play intermission was hot as hell and I enjoyed how many people subdued him right away. c.) The play itself was very fun and it shows great characterization for Todd and how egotistical he really is. This is my fave chapter of the sequel so far. Now if i was to give ACTUAL criticism, i feel kinda cheated and miffed that we missed Chester's mindscape yet again! We never saw his conversion on the original Slave Academy and we are not seeing it again here! Also, I find it kinda odd that Mike was not among the audience in this chapter. I thought he was meant to be Todds bodyguard. Other than that, I still love this series tho, dont get me wrong on that!

To the anonymous commenter, I guess if your purpose for reading this story is to read a plot full of twist and turns in the story then I guess you wont be having a goid time. But as a fan of the previous Slave Academy series, I am thorougly enjoying these chapters, especially this one. In my opinion, I feel like this sequel was written primarily to give us a glimpse on how Todd's world order looks like after he won on thr previous series. And I think Swizz has done a tremendously commendable job at doing that as he fabricated a very detailed story on how Todd Cove Academy functions after his rule had been cemented. On top of that, the whole development with the Lane character has also been interesting as well since he is an adversary that Todd does not see coming. So in conclusion, its not fair to say that Swizz can't write a "well thought out story" when the evidence points to the contrary. Just because it doesnt fit the criterias youre looking for in a story doesn't mean its bad. So please don't throw such harsh comments to an author who doesn't deserve it, especially to someone who works as hard to provide stories on this site as Swizz

Buffy67, it depends what you mean by sex. Full on anal intercourse between two men? 'Fraid not. There will be some dick sucking and some anal penetration, but not a whole lot. Like the original Slave Academy, I'm not really focusing on sex here. I'm not good at writing sex scenes and I don't particularly enjoy writing them either :-)

@anonymous poster above 'New Guy in Town': Yeah, I agree the mindscapes have the most potential for hotness and excitement. And coming into this story, I knew I had written myself into a little bit of a corner with Todd's power loss, because it was his sadistic nature that led to those scenes being so different. He wanted to come up with new, innovative ways to torture and enslave people. Dylan and Nathan on the other hand, the ones now making the slaves, are of course also enthralled themselves, so it's reasonable to expect that their methods of control are more efficient and pragmatic. They aren't doing it for pleasure, like Todd was. With that being said, we will see several more mindscape scenes throughout the story, and hopefully you will enjoy some of them :-) @everyone else commenting here: Thank you for your support! I am glad to see so many people interested and enjoying the story. :-)

Will sex eventually be in the story ?

Thank you to all three writers for writing a really nice story; it's really cool to see this type of collaboration. Maybe this could be the basis of a writing contest. But it was really enjoyable to see the story advance through different styles and techniques. Please do this again if you all have the time.