What a great part 2. Well-written! Loved it.

please tell me you are continuing this!

looking forward to more. This is great.

No matter what any outcome is, I can not get enough of being forced drugged & abused. I would pay anybody to do that to me.

Oh God sooo hot as always. another error though: "as the jerking of my ass made my cock throb while the throbbing in my ass made my dick jerk" I think you meant: "as the jerking of my cock made my ass throb while the throbbing in my ass made my dick jerk"

loved it sm. kinda wished they ditched the chick tho and maybe he turned out to be a feeder to John.

love the idea of mass enslavement.

@Lord and Master in London Great story so far; really finding Mark's corruption at the hands of Bill and his construction crew difficult to read with only one hand to hold my tablet. I have found this story to be greatly improved over GymBox; I am sure that must have been difficult to achieve as those chapters were incredibly well done. If I have one criticism it's a small one. It is one that is commonly repeated by many authors, here and in other story archives I belong too and I only mention it, as it is, at least for me when reading erotic writing, distracting. It involves of the "sense of place" an author conveys when setting a story and creating a cast of characters in a country, city or neighborhood that is not his or her own. Here, you have made the conscious choice to set your story in the oppressive heat of Los Angeles and you have been very effective in conveying to the reader the shear weight and physicality of the unrelenting heat and its befuddling effects on the mind; it’s believable to the point that I can feel it along with Mark. However when it comes to the characters my belief that Mark, Bill and the Crew live and work in LA or were even born in the US, is shaken. The characters use slang, idiomatic expressions and turns of phases that are a product of your experience and culture and not the culture of the characters which you have clearly identified as being American. We are all products of our environmental up bringing and how we speak often migrates into the words we write; how the words are spelled on the page/screen, the grammatical structure of a character's dialogue and even the cadence of their voice is important. It frequently happens; its difficult and a challenge at the best of times to overcome but it's critical if you want believability. In fiction and especially erotic fiction an essential part of the enjoyment for the reader is the perception of the sense of place created by the author. Here, I believe Mark really does work in the desert hills of California, he even sounds moderately American but Bill and the Crew … definitely the UK.

looks promising! hope to read more from Dylan's perspective!

I have a lot more coming hopefully today or tomorrow. Your positive feedback and positive reviews are super encouraging. Thanks!