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Ozark
4/27/20, 7:57 AM
@hypnothrill Thanks for the input! I'm slightly dyslexic so stuff like that always slips through. plus i wrote this on my phone so its a little harder to edit lol. Right off the bat if i ever do a prequel it will definitely be a little more character heavy and if i ever do a sequel it will definitely just jump right into the erotic stuff, maybe even toy around with the mass enslavement concept here and there. But yeah, I'm definitely considering adding on to it now.
4/27/20, 7:56 AM
Very good story! Expecting a follow-up! Thanks!
May 3, 2005
4/27/20, 7:40 AM
Great! Very creative and inspiring! Expecting a follow-up!
MenthaPiperata
4/27/20, 7:15 AM
it's super hot ^^ thx for the story :)
Anonymous
4/27/20, 6:51 AM
This was good.
4/27/20, 6:43 AM
Once we get to the sexy parts, the story is great. I feel like the characterization could use a bit of work. What would really help is if you had a few more sentences establishing Jose and Jayson's friendship, plus a bit more dialog to establish that there's now something wrong with Jose. (A bit of proofreading would help too, since Jose's name appears as "Joes" a couple of times). But I really would love to read a prequel--or better still, a sequel where the landlord gets taken over by the plant and then feels compelled to spread its seed to his other tenants.
Moby
4/27/20, 3:30 AM
This is awesome! Can't wait to see more!
4/27/20, 2:52 AM
I fixed the confusing line. No matter how many times you proofread, sometimes a mistake creeps through. Thanks for the heads up.
4/27/20, 1:41 AM
@Cyclops: Don't get me wrong, I loved this section just like the other sections; just felt like just when we start to see Collin and how Right Control works, the section ends. It's your story and if it's taking you in a certain direction then you have to follow. I as the reader am only along for the ride; I go where you want me to go.
4/27/20, 1:37 AM
Danke für diese tolle Story, schön, auch was deutsches zu lesen hier. Ich hoffe, du hast noch lange Ideen und Lust zu Schreiben!