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May 3, 2005
4/27/20, 7:40 AM
Great! Very creative and inspiring! Expecting a follow-up!
MenthaPiperata
4/27/20, 7:15 AM
it's super hot ^^ thx for the story :)
Anonymous
4/27/20, 6:51 AM
This was good.
4/27/20, 6:43 AM
Once we get to the sexy parts, the story is great. I feel like the characterization could use a bit of work. What would really help is if you had a few more sentences establishing Jose and Jayson's friendship, plus a bit more dialog to establish that there's now something wrong with Jose. (A bit of proofreading would help too, since Jose's name appears as "Joes" a couple of times). But I really would love to read a prequel--or better still, a sequel where the landlord gets taken over by the plant and then feels compelled to spread its seed to his other tenants.
Moby
4/27/20, 3:30 AM
This is awesome! Can't wait to see more!
4/27/20, 2:52 AM
I fixed the confusing line. No matter how many times you proofread, sometimes a mistake creeps through. Thanks for the heads up.
4/27/20, 1:41 AM
@Cyclops: Don't get me wrong, I loved this section just like the other sections; just felt like just when we start to see Collin and how Right Control works, the section ends. It's your story and if it's taking you in a certain direction then you have to follow. I as the reader am only along for the ride; I go where you want me to go.
4/27/20, 1:37 AM
Danke für diese tolle Story, schön, auch was deutsches zu lesen hier. Ich hoffe, du hast noch lange Ideen und Lust zu Schreiben!
Anonymous
4/27/20, 12:04 AM
This was awesome! So hot 🔥🔥 I can't wait for the next one
4/26/20, 11:56 PM
very hot.