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4/23/20, 11:39 PM
i cant wait for the next installment!! keep up the great work! This really got me off!
4/23/20, 10:51 PM
Loved this. Especially the whole making everyone better aspect. Its what I like.
4/23/20, 10:47 PM
Freakin' awesome story! I bask in your innovation, sir.
blankbot
4/23/20, 10:46 PM
Wow! Impressive.
Anonymous
4/23/20, 10:41 PM
Loved it! (I'm rock hard and didn't even touch myself) I like the kink being about him mind controlling them into being better; it's a nice fresh spin on things.
Apr 23, 2020
4/23/20, 10:08 PM
Thanks for the feedback! I figured it was a bit of a cop out to end up skipping over the a actual sex but I didn't really feel confident writing it and figured that leaving it to your imagination was better than writing it poorly. I was going for the idea that Luke blacked out on the way to the bedroom but was in a hurry to wrap things up and that needs some more polish. You're definitely right about it needing more details, I was worried about pacing but I ended up making the transformation way faster than I wanted. I'll definitely try to give this a good revision for that at the very least.
4/23/20, 9:08 PM
I love a good mind and body transformation, Still remembering the past but unable to access details is a great scene which I often fantasize about! No sex scenes needed in well executed erotic stories like this. Possibly even better for it!
4/23/20, 8:57 PM
Oh damn.... i need a part two! It's so fucking hot! Maybe get some piss in that big shitty diaper as well?
4/23/20, 8:50 PM
ooo, very hot. Love the whole facesitting kink, and the whole hypnotic fart thing is pretty hot. could you do, like, a human chair thing? like, Evans uses Jason as a chair, and blows nice, stinky farts down his mouth all day, while Jason is still forced to rub his dick.
4/23/20, 8:07 PM
Very hot story. cant wait for the next chapters! Keep it up!