marvelous! just marvelous!! a fascinating idea wound together with the rich and bloody history of 16th century Europe. bravo!

I've imagined this story to be real life so many times! :)

Oh, and I definitely didn't miss that bit about something gym related being the whole reason he came out here in the first place. And the "something to keep you stupid" throwaway comment. You're pressing so many of my buttons here bro! Can't wait for more.

Hottest story I've read in a while, and that's really saying something. I have to imagine that they talked about some of this stuff, if only as the narrator's "wouldn't want this in real life, but..." fantasies. Either that, or those hypno docility loops were crazy effective, because I'd have been murderously furious. I LOVE that the tist/Dom/Boss was confident enough to let him leave with his wallet - the psychological impact is so much harder knowing that the narrator is trying to get away but at the same time colluding on some unconscious level - harder for the reader, and harder for *him*, which I'm sure you'll get to. If I have any complaint at all (besides "too short! MOAR!"), it's that he seems to accept that he's already broken a bit too easily at the end there. So many other elements I can relate to and love, from the way he reacts to sleeping in the guy's gym, to the Adidas workout gear-turned-slut clothes (is he wearing Sambas? Superstars? are they well-used and moist with His scent? yeah it's a fetish, lol), to the opaque black contact lenses I've never heard of but now am fascinated with. And I'm a total hypno slut for layered, multi-track, pseudo-subliminal mp3s. Hope we get to hear some of the actual lines used, whether echoing in his memory or when he's exposed to new ones. So looking

SN1544 reporting for duty..... Great story, Man. I don't know how I didn't see this one before.

Very hot, would definitely like to read more.

Fun story. I would have liked to read more about what Red Lightning was feeling when he started transforming and after he finished transforming. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Oh, this is hot! Can't wait to read more.

lots of set up. either you are personally familiar with such organizations and structures or did some research. some parts. like the masturbation and the ear buds (he had custom players with individualized lists and music but no ear buds? when he knows he is making changes?) I am plot nickpicky hence my low scores. if I had a criticism it would be gets perfectly fine to have a tension and mood building chapter with no sex in it just so long as we get a feel for the characters setting set up and where things are going it's already a bit much when you describe the character and make him obviously sexual and a little too loose so it's pretty clear he's probably a phony or at least a corrupt president. even more so when you have him literally Spate to the audience that he's putting subliminal messages and things when you been otherwise oblique or carefully building tension with straight request and interactions and set up. But when you have an out-of-place oh look there's just one bed and you have him with companion that's perfectly torn proportioned and then has him go off when he says he's nervous to masturbate and then nearby shower? In addition to the fact that apparently he already has a custom app that allows him to use cameras all over the place. the camera thing is almost good that sense of voyeurism or threat that's unseen by one character but enjoyed by another and it would be interesting to see how he responded examining the guy Shuki obviously have been scoping out and had plans for. But when the masturbation happens it feels like a step too far and that ruins the tension that's been building up please include a for me at the end of any statement that talks about your story. Obviously this is a subjective opinion. And more importantly I'm commenting most of all because I think that's a promise. I hope to see it go forward hand if you can balance that intention as well as the diversity of the cast flush out their characters and setting as well as blend the procedural with the sexual or the gratification

This is sooo hot ! Well done Thanks for writing and please write more 😀