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4/9/20, 12:32 AM
"... loosing Rocky’s siblings never to be, now mere flavoring for the sauce that Rocky then greedily guzzled down." I laughed hard and clapped on that one. Very clever. It was a great story. A nice twist for a Dad/son story.
Anonymous
4/9/20, 12:01 AM
this is so good. i need a new chapter right now!
4/8/20, 11:52 PM
Very nice chapter; definitely like the way you take over the prison by releasing the snakes from the Prince's body.
jai
4/8/20, 11:12 PM
Love this
4/8/20, 11:00 PM
Excellent story, although I am surprised the jock wasn't able to smell his father when they were sitting at the table together ;)
4/8/20, 10:47 PM
since he was the manager and was on relative good terms to Alex, I don't see him on a bad situation, maybe turned into a bearish or muscular power bottom, while still managing the place
4/8/20, 10:32 PM
wonderful ! more !
Drake Nightstrom
4/8/20, 8:55 PM
Darkblade2814 You know, that's a really great question that could be answered! Soon!
4/8/20, 8:50 PM
I'm not as negative as Heru Kane about the process, but I kinda of wonder how the Seals are different after going through this process. You explain the sexual bonding that they go through, but how are they different in carrying out Seal team missions now that they are bonded together? How are they different as human beings? That question is something you don't really touch upon that I really want to know. Joe and Mike now have this bond; how are they different as brothers and trainers now? I think it's because you create a solid world that I have these questions, but these are the questions that come from your work.
4/8/20, 8:38 PM
I have to be the naysayer among the comments; to me the sexual components felt over the top and out of place. I do like the basic story of Dr. Leach working in the world of contractors, running afowl of Captain Connor, and then getting his revenge on him. However, the sexual dimension of the story doesn't seem to be grounded as well. That Leach would be taping footage of his controlled players and coaches and sharing that footage is a risk of exposure; even if it was on the dark web, it could get out and ruin his chances. To drop that into the story without addressing its implications feels unrealistic. The sexual component to me is there because you want it to be, not because it emerges from the world you've created. Also there are a number of proofreading mistakes that do disrupt the flow of reading.