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4/8/20, 8:34 PM
I know this is old but, what happened to Ben?
Anonymous
4/8/20, 8:28 PM
This is so hot ! I agree with the previous comment about the football origin story. But a continuation chapter is also appreciated. Thanks for writing !
4/8/20, 7:42 PM
Goooood. Let the bate flow through you. Nya ha ha ha! >;D
4/8/20, 7:15 PM
really fucking HOT!!!!!
Anonymous
4/8/20, 7:07 PM
Fuck, reading this has made me masturbate. I must masturbate!!!!
Anonymous
4/8/20, 6:22 PM
Amazing again! Can't wait for the next chapter.
Anonymous
4/8/20, 5:10 PM
fuck loving this series ๐Ÿ˜ˆ๐Ÿ˜ˆ
firesix
4/8/20, 5:06 PM
๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘€๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘€๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘€๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘€๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘€ good shit goเฑฆิ sHit๐Ÿ‘Œ thats โœ” some good๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œshit right๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œthere๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ rightโœ”there โœ”โœ”if i do ฦฝaาฏ so my self ๐Ÿ’ฏ i say so ๐Ÿ’ฏ thats what im talking about right there right there (chorus: สณแถฆแตสฐแต— แต—สฐแต‰สณแต‰) mMMMMแŽทะœ๐Ÿ’ฏ ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ ๐Ÿ‘ŒะO0ะžเฌ OOOOOะžเฌ เฌ Ooooแต’แต’แต’แต’แต’แต’แต’แต’แต’๐Ÿ‘Œ ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ ๐Ÿ‘Œ ๐Ÿ’ฏ ๐Ÿ‘Œ ๐Ÿ‘€ ๐Ÿ‘€ ๐Ÿ‘€ ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘ŒGood shit (Meme aside, this is wonderful. Thanks for coming back to the site and blessing us with this.)
4/8/20, 4:49 PM
Thank you OsoDulce. I'm still critical of it because I've always been taught that 'show, don't tell' stories are better - although Austen's "Emma" starts out a bit of 'tell' doesn't it? - I'll be continuing this one, but I've decided also to post a re-write trying to do a more 'show' style. Though at the moment, I'm caring for my mom since she's not well, just taking a brief breather. I'll get back to it as soon as I can. :) Both of them.
4/8/20, 4:41 PM
Really enjoyed this story and from the ending, looks like another chapter is on its way. I liked how Captain Connor, was captured was brainwashed, what got me was " you will also handle the enslavement of all of your workmen, you see the hero captain is now a villain.โ€ by Dr Leach, those word in a story always makes my cock twitch