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Anonymous
4/8/20, 6:22 PM
Amazing again! Can't wait for the next chapter.
Anonymous
4/8/20, 5:10 PM
fuck loving this series ๐Ÿ˜ˆ๐Ÿ˜ˆ
firesix
4/8/20, 5:06 PM
๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘€๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘€๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘€๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘€๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘€ good shit goเฑฆิ sHit๐Ÿ‘Œ thats โœ” some good๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œshit right๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œthere๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ rightโœ”there โœ”โœ”if i do ฦฝaาฏ so my self ๐Ÿ’ฏ i say so ๐Ÿ’ฏ thats what im talking about right there right there (chorus: สณแถฆแตสฐแต— แต—สฐแต‰สณแต‰) mMMMMแŽทะœ๐Ÿ’ฏ ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ ๐Ÿ‘ŒะO0ะžเฌ OOOOOะžเฌ เฌ Ooooแต’แต’แต’แต’แต’แต’แต’แต’แต’๐Ÿ‘Œ ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘Œ ๐Ÿ‘Œ ๐Ÿ’ฏ ๐Ÿ‘Œ ๐Ÿ‘€ ๐Ÿ‘€ ๐Ÿ‘€ ๐Ÿ‘Œ๐Ÿ‘ŒGood shit (Meme aside, this is wonderful. Thanks for coming back to the site and blessing us with this.)
4/8/20, 4:49 PM
Thank you OsoDulce. I'm still critical of it because I've always been taught that 'show, don't tell' stories are better - although Austen's "Emma" starts out a bit of 'tell' doesn't it? - I'll be continuing this one, but I've decided also to post a re-write trying to do a more 'show' style. Though at the moment, I'm caring for my mom since she's not well, just taking a brief breather. I'll get back to it as soon as I can. :) Both of them.
4/8/20, 4:41 PM
Really enjoyed this story and from the ending, looks like another chapter is on its way. I liked how Captain Connor, was captured was brainwashed, what got me was " you will also handle the enslavement of all of your workmen, you see the hero captain is now a villain.โ€ by Dr Leach, those word in a story always makes my cock twitch
4/8/20, 4:18 PM
Hot start. Bit of constructive feedback: try not to just enumerate thing happening, tell the story. Hope to see more from you.
blankbot
4/8/20, 4:15 PM
Nice first effort.
Mar 29, 2019
4/8/20, 4:12 PM
terrific story! HOT!!!
4/8/20, 4:09 PM
The whole loosimg their core and soul smd energy have me shaking my head. It reduces the sexiness a bit and makes it more horror, which isn't fun.
Anonymous
4/8/20, 3:32 PM
So fucking hot. This is a great story, it had me hard the whole time. Frat boys in sport gears...delicious.