Recent Comments

4/7/20, 7:47 PM
I love your work, PupScout, and I thought this story had some really hot imagery. But I wanted to offer a little suggestion. Have you thought about occasionally switching to omniscient 3rd person narration when delivering exposition? You're trying to put all the exposition in the dialogue and in Joe's internal monologue, and to me, some parts of that are ringing false, because these mind-controlled recruits are noticing all these uncanny little details (e.g. Joe observing how his brother's cock looks different and then "pondering the change").
Evelded
4/7/20, 6:09 PM
Awesome! My favorite GSS writer is back! I was afraid you'd died or found religion or something. :) Now, /please/ write a few more chapters for "Dare Me!"
4/7/20, 6:08 PM
Nice story; I'm a fan for the stories that end with a happy ending. This one ends with a romantic happy ending, so it will get support from me for the challenge (along with a couple of other stories). Even better that it comes out of a collaborative moment with Ng5hvlo4; it's nice to see authors working together on the site.
4/7/20, 6:07 PM
Well done Cap'n. It hits its flow when you get to the masterfully written sex/fetish stuff. I'm not even into rubber and I found it hot. I was pleased the ending gave the couple some depth; it gave me some needed development for both characters but *especially* Yannick.
4/7/20, 5:51 PM
Glad to see you back at work, PupScout. And you're being very ambitious in making the Navy Seals your subject in this story. At first I thought this couldn't be part of the First Time challenge, but then I saw the changes to the rules that allow it. But whether it is in the challenge or not, this is something I definitely will be following to see where you take it.
Apr 6, 2020
Leather Gaymer
4/7/20, 5:31 PM
love the full leather concept need more stories with tight leather pants, etc. great job
Jue
4/7/20, 5:24 PM
We need more plse, this story was beyond fantastic!!!! Love the Hog King 😍😍
4/7/20, 5:19 PM
I'd like to remind everyone reading this that anyone is free to contribute chapters to this series! Varlance and I already have the "main plotline" (which follows every first choice) planned out, but we'd love to see interested readers take a stab at writing other branches (especially failure endings!)
cracker
4/7/20, 4:53 PM
Hey, thanks for comments love feedback even if via my email
Anonymous
4/7/20, 4:17 PM
that was hot be hotter if they fucked your holes too