Recent Comments

Anonymous
4/5/20, 7:01 PM
Fucking hot!
Anonymous
4/5/20, 6:02 PM
Wow. This is...lengthy. I can tell you have an interesting idea here, and it was a good attempt. Many first attempts I read are too short and too quick. It is apparent that you take your time with writing, which is a plus. But your set-up is way too long. I am not going to lie, I lost interest halfway through. Going forward, specifically for a site like this, I would recommend smaller chapters as the first chapter. Get your audience's attention. Once you have that, then you can gradually lengthen your chapters. I would also recommend less monologuing what's going to happen. Perhaps you let it happen and then provide an explanation. Let your audience try to guess or understand what is happening before spelling it all out for them. I hope that's helpful advice for you going forward.
Anonymous
4/5/20, 5:29 PM
Ahh u am sorry to hear you were unable to write but glad you are feeling better!! Yes no worries I will keep checking back for new stuff! Very excited to read it and really do love your stuff!!
Mattress_Wilson
4/5/20, 5:29 PM
The usage of a/b/o dynamics is such a galaxy brain move
4/5/20, 4:28 PM
Unnffff hypno-induced obsession with masturbation is so hot! I wish there was more of it!!
Ben
4/5/20, 4:25 PM
So good. When will the next chapter be out?!
blankbot
4/5/20, 4:22 PM
Nice!
Swizzington
4/5/20, 4:19 PM
Hello! With the coronavirus upheaval, I have been unable to write for several weeks. However, I am now recently back to it and making good progress. I don't want to overpromise by putting a date on things, but I'm hoping to have something released fairly soon!
4/5/20, 4:08 PM
hope to see this story continue
Anonymous
4/5/20, 3:58 PM
I agree with Kinky newzealander, As an Alpha boi, regaining a few inches and his "spirited fight" keeps the competition alive and makes their commitment more believable. Excellent story and well teased!