Recent Comments

4/4/20, 7:53 PM
I'm definitely late to the party that is this story, but I think it is amazing. Your work reminds me of Brian Lumley's Necroscope series of books. You do with Mexican mythology what he does with vampire mythology: rework and expand upon certain parts while maintaining the core central issues and themes. You both have a way with creating very altered hideous versions of animals; the corruption of the animals in your story reminded me of the flyers and other creatures the Wamphyri in Lumley's stories create. All and all this is a really unique and fascinating work you've created and I'm glad you're back to working on it. I may have never found it in the archives of stories, but now that I have I've bookmarked it to never lose it again. Please keep working on this story; you have a very devoted fan in me waiting for the next part.
4/4/20, 7:31 PM
I'm a little late to the party, but I have to respond to the Master's (aka Hypnothrill) comment. The story works on the level of myth particularly Aztec or Mayan mythology, so it works on the general level; the characters don't have to be so defined to play the role that they do in the story. I think that characters could be more defined, but doing so runs the risk of losing that mythological connection and making it into a story with mythological tones. It depends on what you as an author want to achieve. I think he's going for that mythological tone, so non-defined characters work.
4/4/20, 6:55 PM
You might have to copy it from Word and then make adjustments; that's how I upload my stories. I generally love where the story is going, but I have to say that this leg felt a bit rushed in pacing. The fast pace definitely worked with the action of Ben breaking into Nick's apartment and grabbing Nick, but the back half definitely felt it could've been a bit slower and had Nick fighting a bit more. But aside from that good story and keep putting the chapters out.
4/4/20, 3:43 PM
Hey guys, please come back! I can't wait to read more! I love this story so much!
Anonymous
4/4/20, 3:13 PM
Great story
4/4/20, 2:52 PM
If anyone can tell me how to format it on here properly, that would be great.
4/4/20, 2:46 PM
That's actually how I had it formatted when I wrote it, but this site won't recognize that formatting for some reason.
4/4/20, 2:27 PM
super hot story! keep writing pleasw
Anonymous
4/4/20, 2:05 PM
It's a good story but the formatting is bad. You need a break between speakers. It's like one long run on sentence. It takes away from what would otherwise be a very good story. Try a new line for each speaker or clarifying who is saying what with their names
Anonymous
4/4/20, 1:10 PM
such a hot story and transformation!!!