Recent Comments

Anonymous
3/29/20, 11:52 AM
great story hope you continue this , see a few of brads friends in , plus will larkin release him after 2 weeks
Anonymous
3/29/20, 11:50 AM
One of the best stories I have ever read on this site. Keep it up, it's so hot.
LongtimeFan
3/29/20, 11:25 AM
Amazing stuff! Your writing is still impeccable ("Bette Davis playing tag," what a line). And I love how you present the dangers of consumption/consumerism/monopolies in a way that almost makes the reader forget. We want to cheer for Jamie's transformation--but with every new Reflex product and market, he's spending more money, and they're taking over more and more. Pleasure is a lot harder to resist than pain...well done! And thank you for the distancing reminder, too. Please be safe, everyone!
Anonymous
3/29/20, 10:50 AM
spectacular
3/29/20, 10:19 AM
love this man! keep it up :)
Anonymous
3/29/20, 8:56 AM
what about the dad do you want JoSmith to do? i think the story between them both is still developing and maybe in the future, there may be something happening since we still dont know a lot of the chip. idk, just theorizing
Mar 28, 2020
CopsRhot
3/29/20, 7:35 AM
Love cops that end up getting corrupted. I especially like stories where the cop's morals get compromised. I agree with Pupscout's comment. The mind control feels too easy and abrupt. I also think that there should be more challenge in taking down the cops. Overall though, you are doing a good job!
3/29/20, 7:28 AM
love the idea. The action not for me. Also Rick seems more an assume to me than Chad so any glee from revenge feels forced. any reminder of what Chad did passively pales for Rick actively doing. especially if analogous with different circumstances. oh No he smirks at opening jars and grabs his lover. Rick smug and entitled throughout and more than groped not lovers. shrug. But imaginative contrast of transformation and consideration of position and thoughts. plus setup and insight to changes in perspective character.
Mar 28, 2020
Anonymous
3/29/20, 7:07 AM
An absolutely hot tale. To echo others, nothing like oblivious cops being taken advantage of by prisoners.
Canned Food
3/29/20, 4:15 AM
I definitely like the progress of the story! However, can we do something about the dad :(