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3/27/20, 8:06 AM
BRAVO!
Albi Allred
3/27/20, 2:24 AM
do a spiderman chapter
3/27/20, 1:09 AM
Wow. That was great!
3/27/20, 12:34 AM
next part soon?
3/27/20, 12:21 AM
Amazing idea and execution; to go from seer and author to part of the story. Really makes me want to enter a few stories on this site. Well done; so now that you're in your world what are you going to do for your Pharaoh?
nycboot
3/27/20, 12:00 AM
I love self-referential stories. :)
nycboot
3/26/20, 11:47 PM
I've re-read this chapter again. In the prologue the guy intones a prayer. But in this chapter, it's as if the pacing of the words is a prayer. Especially after Adom has shocked Raveed into submission. Beautiful!
Anonymous
3/26/20, 10:54 PM
hot af
Anonymous
3/26/20, 10:47 PM
It could be much better if the protagonist or others held conversations or we knew more about the them like their physical appearance... it is still part 2 and hope to see more soon. Thanks!!
Anonymous
3/26/20, 10:39 PM
thank you!! setting itself was so good and i really enjoyed it. as said above, it sadly went too fast. it was a nice setup, quite solid and it could be developed into a great story arc. i'm looking forward to seeing where it goes.