Recent Comments

firesix
3/17/20, 2:44 AM
I think there should be a signal or something that this isn't a full story. It seems fine, just a note.
Anonymous
3/17/20, 1:50 AM
As much as Hector is missing a few points, I find I'm still rooting for him. I hope that he manages to come out on top in the end with slave perfectly in love and subservient to him. I'm a sucker for happy endings.
Ng5hvlo4
3/17/20, 1:11 AM
I felt something as I was reading this touching story and made me feel all soft on the inside. This is a balm for the soul and I look forward to reading the rest of it
3/17/20, 12:20 AM
Sometimes you don't have to explain anything. I like walking into a story like walking into a room. You see what's going on and might not know how it came to be. The nanos were a nice surprise. And I loved the concept of "you are one, I am one, fuckin' we are one… part of the many, soon the one will be all.
3/16/20, 11:28 PM
Reducing Ben to just a sex to is so awesomely twisted. A really creative and horny idea.
Anonymous
3/16/20, 9:05 PM
Scary and sexy at the same time!
nycboot
3/16/20, 8:19 PM
I'm purposely reading this story first from Hector's point of view and then slave's. But in this episode there is a difference. In Hector's point of view, slave seems like a cypher - I don't quite get him. He remembers his previous life but seems to accept slavery without question. But from slave's point of view one sees that he is really beginning to fall for Hector, if not in a sexual manner at least in an emotional manner. If Hector is ever able to make slave surrender his body, and most important, get him to surrender his mind (so that Overmind would be unnecessary) that ....would be the end of the story. :) Looking forward to the next installments.
nycboot
3/16/20, 7:56 PM
Gee, that sequence where Slave was taking control was very scary! I actually had difficulty reading it because it was so painful from Hector's point of view. In this version of the story Hector is the protagonist but, as I and others have commented previously, he's not all that smart. He's going to have to really smarten up if he wants to allow slave to have deep feelings for him.
Anonymous
3/16/20, 7:44 PM
Great story. Hope there is more of it soon.
Thames
3/16/20, 5:34 PM
The first reader who didn't like the story misses the point: it's fiction! Disregard the narrow view and keep on. I thought it was great. It's not my type of fantasy but it was well written, well paced and one felt the conflict. Good work!