Recent Comments

malskin
2/10/20, 9:59 AM
wow another great chapter, for me i am liking the fact that Noel is being attracted to the rubber clad drone, i hope that system thats that into account for his designation
transformheaven
2/10/20, 7:31 AM
I agree with slowing it down a little. As for your writing, most mistakes are in weird ways of using verbs, something the free version of Grammarly can help you with, so consider checking that out! :) Great idea and arousing story though ;)
Anonymous
2/10/20, 7:24 AM
Would love to see more
NZCUB
2/10/20, 5:43 AM
You have a amazing way of narrating & presenting stories, I have read and re read your stories many times and loved them all, please keep up the great work.
Anonymous
2/10/20, 5:39 AM
You going to continue writing more :)?
Anonymous
2/10/20, 5:15 AM
wow...i wonder what will happen once you bring out the pimp....that will be so hot!!!!!!
2/10/20, 5:05 AM
Hope Ivan isn't brain damaged and there are no lasting effects.
Anonymous
2/10/20, 5:02 AM
The writing was too rushed and doesn't make sense. Go a little slower and think about what you're writing and how it sounds when you speak it out loud.
Anonymous
2/10/20, 4:08 AM
Well, first, let's start with the writing. It sucked. It was written and never edited. Second, the story -- holy shit! I think that's all I can handle.
Anonymous
2/10/20, 4:02 AM
Hot and funny, especially at the end!!!