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ForgottenCradle
2/2/20, 6:30 PM
more coaches always gets a thumbs up from me. great chapter and enslavement of those two
2/2/20, 6:29 PM
He definitely will be; things go from planned gradual-control to utter chaos. I'm excited to publish the next chapter, although the revisions are taking me longer than anticipated as I've hit writer's block.
Anonymous
2/2/20, 5:48 PM
still around?
Anonymous
2/2/20, 5:13 PM
Wow, erotic but so sad. It's so well written a great story and one of the first that stirs real emotion. It's too sad to be sexy if you know what I mean.
2/2/20, 4:32 PM
best new idea ever give us an interesting demonstration fun ideas. Ultimately this just feels fresh and Innovative and you go all out with it. I hope to see refinements on the idea and your style. thank you
Geoff M
2/2/20, 3:33 PM
excitedly looking forward to the next chapter!
swngbthways@gmail.com
2/2/20, 3:00 PM
I bookmarked EVERY. SINGLE. CHAPTER. in my favorite stories. I CAN'T WAIT what happens next!
Feb 25, 2016
Ethan
2/2/20, 1:51 PM
Very erotic.
malskin
2/2/20, 1:10 PM
if this happens it will be one hell of a hot story blufman 1 is an extremely good writer
Anonymous
2/2/20, 9:20 AM
It's a neat idea, I guess. But the plot felt bizarre and unfocused. If I didn't have some knowledge into Marvel's greater lore this would've all been impossible to understand. Even with this just felt like I was being pulled along to random events and people I don't care about. And then all the grammatical issues. It was difficult getting through the plot, but the sentence structure was another beast to deal with. I'm glad to see people interested in writing. But I strongly suggest that you try working with a few drafts and revision edits beforehand.