Recent Comments

Anonymous
1/15/20, 7:15 PM
Missing a chance for a lot of erotic details. Case in point, just using the last paragraph: "Then a duplicate formed of the boy"...That ONE sentence could be fully expanded into a chapter on its own, or at least a couple of hot paragraphs. You have a decent foundation for a story, as they say the devil is in the details...you need to expand the picture.
Anonymous
1/15/20, 5:59 PM
очень понравился,хочу новые рассказы
dm300charmed
1/15/20, 4:46 PM
From UK Love this! please continue.
joaopomilio@hotmail.com
1/15/20, 3:43 PM
also I hope you do a new Magazine Sex Diary? this time in Austin, Texas, with a Cowboy?
EatingMenFaeces
1/15/20, 3:37 PM
Hot stories! Wish there could be more
1/15/20, 3:11 PM
The most fun part bout this yarn was the punchline...hilarious! I also enjoyed the slow build effect
1/15/20, 2:52 PM
A vastly superior continuation, and loads of fun!
1/15/20, 2:40 PM
Usually I love your stories, Hypnothrill, and this one has several interesting approaches melded together; however, the languaging seems a little forced to me. Granted , I'm not even remotely British, and those who are may have a different perspective (and thus, I differ to them), but I do at least respect the idea of it.
Anonymous
1/15/20, 2:27 PM
I love it!! please continue
David S
1/15/20, 2:26 PM
@Hypnothrill Hey now, this was his first story here -- and you are one of the best authors on this site -- could you give this author some constructive feedback on how to develop his writing talent? @alienkiller is coming up with some great ideas with this plot, he just needs to learn how to develop them into a fully-developed story. (Also, alienkiller, I'm using "he/his" for brevity here. You could be any gender in real life, and gender definitely doesn't matter to me.) Maybe we should have a new forum on here, "How to develop your ideas into a great story."