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Jan 11, 2020
1/11/20, 12:48 PM
Always great to get a new tomozco story, and I thought the various plot twists in this one were very hot. I just wish the story was longer, because we barely got a chance to know who these characters were or how they'd behave normally when not following hypnotic commands.
Jan 11, 2020
1/11/20, 12:43 PM
I really like this premise, and I think the writing is strong. But the POV shift doesn't do the story any favors. We get some exciting build-up in the first half of the story, and then before we get to the sexy climax, we cut away to the doctor's POV, and then the rest of Darren's mental transformation is described in dry, clinical terms. It might have been better to insert a short cutaway to the doctor's POV, then switch back to Darren's POV.
Anonymous
1/11/20, 12:22 PM
So good! I wish you'd put like a dominant bottom cousin that Liam would hate to fuck. but he has to. oh wait. Make that his dad. I'm so psyched about what you're going write next!
Anonymous
1/11/20, 8:23 AM
Not wanting to be rude but there were a few things that really put me off this story. If it turns into a reversal revenge story than maybe I could get it as buildup. If not then this just reads as angry belittlement towards disliked items framed with superiority over disliking them. You've already set up the main character as being without self issues only external ones. And immediately set up the first victim as understandable for his actions. Some of these ideas are real issues that can even have harsh effects. I just don't read this and think that it's going to be shown any other way other than a self promoting domination fic. Please don't take this harshly. I only wanted to offer criticism in a constructive and concerned way.
fingrfethr
1/11/20, 8:18 AM
I don't know whether it's your own work you're rewriting or someone else's. Either way, this is witty, intelligent and stylish erotica and I would love to see more of it! Please continue!
LongtimeFan
1/11/20, 6:21 AM
Incredible! I love the story--you adapt it perfectly, and the descriptions of gorgeous guys getting mindwiped is hot, hot, hot. Please do continue if you like! :)
Anonymous
1/11/20, 5:48 AM
YES! Please continueeee
1/11/20, 4:07 AM
Kind of hurt by that. Not an incel . Like a lot kink it's just trying to subvert a lot of the problematic things in our culture.
Elm
1/11/20, 4:06 AM
Wow! yes please!
cigarJohn
1/11/20, 2:06 AM
fuckin love this story. has fueled many loads!